Foolish

Bleeding words with foolishness.

 

 

Would you look at me … if you’d pass me by?

 

Would you run your needles trough me … like you did last time?

 

Would you feel my thoughts … as my gaze falls into yours?

 

Can you notice … how I yearn to see you… to know you… to be close to you,

 

for the last of the painful moments, I am forced to admit that I can’t fight this feeling.

 

You don’t even care I exist…      

 

Reviews

[Michael X]

...the image of needles is highly effective at transposing emotion
this poem creates a mental impression of desire and affection dying in the shadows
the title captures the intent well.."foolish".. or what it means to want in vain
This is a powerful piece.. i am sure many can relate in one way or another

[Laoidhigh Uilleag]

I'm completely there with you as you feel invisible to the one you want to be the most visible to...

Very nice in message and in the way you use your words in such a short amount of space.

[chord0]

we want love and nobody cares, that is the message I see in this poem. Very short and concise. Imagery is great.

[Poeticpiers]

Oh yes I can empathise withis easily I was painfully shy as a young man and dared not speak to girls who caught my but suffered in silence. Your imagery is most effective

[wizthom]

this poem is a plea for affection love and faith,
all rolled up as one ,question that you answer,
foolish could have been longer, than a shout out..peace wizthom

[Dorchadas]

this is such a beautiful piece Adela... heartfelt and intense.

"Would you run your needles trough me � like you did last time?"

I can sence the emotion here, almost feel the related sensations, amazing imagery... and beautifully written

[Lily1111]

I believe you have captured well the feeling of being disregarded with your words. A heartfelt write.

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Deeply intense..there is an ache of loneliness in your words..a need to feel desired..wanted. Touching concept. Very profound and beautifully written. Great work!=)

[Kitty]

Very powerful. And so sad! I love the way you have written this poem - it has such a emotionally strong feel to it. Such a pity that we should ever have to feel like this though. As if we're invisible.

This is a great write!!!!!

Josie

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, this was very vivid... And it truly is an awful feeling when those we care for won't give us the time of day.

jkb