Very nice piece, but the fonts became so small in later and it's hard for me to read... Guess I really do need that glasses after all lol
Anyway, I can understand why there are small fonts like that, it's because of the whispering and I know why there are so much of the spaces, because it's like taking a real deep breath between speaking the lines...
You minx, I copied this to Notepad, so I could read the otherwise infinitesmal text. ;-)
Sweet, primal, yummy, smile-inducing, of course deeply erotic. Too soulfully hot and delightful to worry about the typos -- what the hell, lovesexy is messy!
This is a great write but very hard to read the very small print. I think we both know that things other then fear can make you tremble. LOL. maybe some people don't get it but I do. It would help if you enlarged the
tiny lines and make it easier to read.
Debby
I think intesense is an understatment here. But that is exactly what true love is!
And if "tender tremble" is an expression error, than we need to do something about the English language :P
Beautiful, stunning-INTENSE!!!!
This world is lost, and all that's left is this tender tremble of this
supernatural phenomena.
I lay exhausted by your side
Your arms wrap around me, and I feel like home.
Embracing me harder,
as your soft adoring kisses touch my skin.
I love you (Yes I cheated so I can read the rest)
Very well done, I like this last verse, I had to decipher it, but it flows so well.
Amazing. Very well written. Poised and refined. only thing is the font, it's too small. though, in a way it is original, and goes with the emotions of the piece. thanks. i added you.
I don't see why that is an expression error - I really liked this - it does what it says on the tin - it brings home a great feeling of intesity - takes the reader to that place that we all strive to be
"This world is lost, and all that's left is this tender tremble of this
supernatural phenomena."
A great way to describe such an indescribable feeling.
Heya,
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