Wish

About giving your hart away.

You

 

 

touched the edge of my hart

making it bleed and beat faster.

 

 

I don’t want to know in how many ways you can brake it …

 

 

I don’t want to be a slave to my emotions.

 

 

I want to stay next to you when you sleep   

I want to feel your soul close to mine

 

and know every detail of your dreams and thoughts

learning to see you as you are

 

I want to be yours.

 

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

normally I just wouldn't say anything because of the typos - but i actually think this is a good piece, so i'll just let you know where they are :)


"hart" = heart

"brake" - break



those were the only real typos. i liked the sentiment within this piece, so much, and the way you spaced it, and the lines themselves - they way they're presented.

[Angel's Lady]

I like the tender way you paint such a picture of love and longing...very visual. Great write!

[Pinky]

I wishful piece!!! Good write!

[Annalisa]

I saw in your profile that you are from Romania, which made me wonder if this was originally written in English or Romanian (actually, I don't know what they speak over there so I hope I didn't just make a fool of myself). The reason that I was unsure is that the piece is a little choppy and reads like a translation. That being said I still really enjoyed this, the yearning and sweetness in this is heartbreakingly beautiful. Lovely work.

(And if I was right, and this is a translation, you should put the original in up in it's original language beside it) :)