Wish

About giving your hart away.

You

 

 

touched the edge of my hart

making it bleed and beat faster.

 

 

I don’t want to know in how many ways you can brake it …

 

 

I don’t want to be a slave to my emotions.

 

 

I want to stay next to you when you sleep   

I want to feel your soul close to mine

 

and know every detail of your dreams and thoughts

learning to see you as you are

 

I want to be yours.

 

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

normally I just wouldn't say anything because of the typos - but i actually think this is a good piece, so i'll just let you know where they are :)


"hart" = heart

"brake" - break



those were the only real typos. i liked the sentiment within this piece, so much, and the way you spaced it, and the lines themselves - they way they're presented.

[missrain]

I can feel that poem, that's all i can say.

[James K. Blaylock]

This one is just beautiful.

jkb

[Greg the Bard]

Aside from the misspelling this a wonderful write. I believe it should be more because it call to me. I beleive Beautiful is a good word for this.

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

This is beautiful=) Such passion in your words. Lovely write!=)

[Thomas James Martin]

I like the simple, powerful expression here, and I looked beyond the typographical errors also, though they are a little distracting. Kara points them out below here. Know English is probably not your first language; we are just trying to help a little.

I like reading your works very much.

Your friend,
Tom

[Joseph - Michael]

Very nice and smooth piece you've created to express your feeling on what you'd do for love...

On the other hand, I agreed with Kara about typos...

Anyway, it's all still great tho...

[Poeticpiers]

you express your wish so clearly in poetic prose but you let yourself down not spellchecking before you post I am guilty myself sometimes of mispellings and typos. MY readers soon let me know ivor

[Dorchadas]

beautiful... so sincere and honest, a really touching poem, thanks for sharing this ~smiles~

[Antonio Valentino]

Very touching and sincere.
A universal kind of wish many share.

Nice piece here.
Keep up the good work!
Rich

[huma]

sublime...
(smile)