Wish

Wish

A Poem by Adela Muresan
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About giving your hart away.

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You

 

 

touched the edge of my hart

making it bleed and beat faster.

 

 

I don’t want to know in how many ways you can brake it …

 

 

I don’t want to be a slave to my emotions.

 

 

I want to stay next to you when you sleep   

I want to feel your soul close to mine

 

and know every detail of your dreams and thoughts

learning to see you as you are

 

I want to be yours.

 

© 2008 Adela Muresan


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normally I just wouldn't say anything because of the typos - but i actually think this is a good piece, so i'll just let you know where they are :)


"hart" = heart

"brake" - break



those were the only real typos. i liked the sentiment within this piece, so much, and the way you spaced it, and the lines themselves - they way they're presented.

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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"I don't want to be a slave to my emotions."

Brilliant line.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely poem with much emotion
TY for entering!

Lynda

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is a balance between the longing for love and exposing one's vulnerability here that is very well expressed. I am sure this resonates with many.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Let me tell you, this in its simplicity and honesty really made me yearn for what you've said. This is my most favorite line:

I don't want to know in how many ways you can break [my heart] �

Wow, so much written in that line. Simply fantastic, I am amazed that you have conveyed so much emotion in such few words. Thank you so very much for sharing. Flora.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is good - the spacing is a nice touch, implying space within your heart. It's a pretty piece and it can be interpreted in a bunch of different ways, which is always good with poetry.

I agree with Kara Emily Krantz, however: you really need to fix the spelling changes, otherwise the poem is confusing and the message becomes all garbled. A little more punctuation would be helpful, too.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A true poem of confession about someone you love. Nice write.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Even with a few flaws, I loved the words.
You can feel the desire for the wish.
Continue with the work, it certainly can touch the heart.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a beautiful expession, full of love and emotion... Love the expression and the movement of each line and phrase... Wonderful!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Its an all comsuming emotion, and one we all feel at some time or another

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful. So emotional... I have this feeling for a guy I love now. This is a GREAT poem!!!!!!!

Josie

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Adela Muresan
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Heya, I'm a 18 year old chick for Romania, studying first year economics in college. I dance while I put my clothes back on the drawer. I like late night net-surfing , reading and reading and read.. more..

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