Thoughts

Life is often unjust, and the people who realize that live suffering.

 

Lupe was beat at 16.00, Lupe was beat, and nauseous when she removed the rubber gloves of her hands.

 

Despite her tiresome, Lupe decided to take a walk.

 

Before her family had financial problems, she wanted to go to an art university and learn how to paint – but in the present conditions that was impossible; and her duty to her family made her angry.

 

It was going to rain. Lupe headed towards the first bus station.

 

She wasn’t the first to think about taking the bus in such a bad weather; the place was full o people- some even more unfortunate than her. The system did not care much for the uneducated half, and only gave them a chance to be able to feed themselves, and maybe afford a place to sleep.

 

A bunch of young men just past the bus station, they seemed joyful and totally undistracted by what happened around them – probably a bunch of rich, arrogant and slightly stupid kids, heading towards the first bar .Lupe had a strong repulsion for those kind of people – their families loved them, fulfilled all their wishes and in return they got lies an disappointments. Those guys in for a lot of surprises when mummy and daddy were gonna’ withdraw their support…

 

Her bus arrives, and she enters it along with the crowd.

 

Maria wasn’t gonna be home for a few hours, so Lupe had the apartment all to herself.

 

Rain drops were hitting the window like little pebbles, making a pleasant sound… Lupe liked to listen to the rain; it made her calm, emptying her mind of all the problems that kept her caught in a small dark place called existence.    

 

    

Reviews

[Greg the Bard]

I'm not familiar with the style that you used but I like it very much. It makes the story easy to follow and read. The pace is very smooth. I have nevered used a sentence as a lead or a finish line but again it works very well here. The use of the third person is really good. Great write