Unbridled Serenity

This is my debut in the realm of publishing, and I've chosen a theme close to my heart: Escaping Reality. It would be wonderful to fall into a beautiful painting if only for a few hours.

Painted skies and green fields

Horses graze lazily under the trees 

You sit and watch them, deep in thought

Oh to be as free as a horse

In the plains no one owns

Oh to gallop to the speed of wind

With no one around to tell you “Stop”

To feel the sun embrace your skin 

And the grass tickle your feet

The weight of the world falling away

Like leaves from a willow’s sway 

Your shoulders unburdened, you smile with glee

How wondrous it would be, to just be free.

~ Adelaide

Reviews

[C.S. Williams]

It made me think of William Blake's Augueries of Innocence, which is a very good thing.
Might recommend periods to indicate where sentences end, it was a little confusing as to when sentences stopped and started.
The sudden rhyme scheme at the very end threw me off. Honestly, I think this poem would benefit from that. It would help bring out that lyrical, song-like quality it has.

Not much for poetry, but I enjoyed the imagery and the sense of beauty you captured in these words. Very much enjoyed it overall.

[emmajoygreen]

' Painted skies and green fields
Horses graze lazily under the trees
You sit and watch them, deep in thought
Oh to be as free as a horse
In the plains no one owns.. '

You set the feel and look of your small part of the world very visually, softly, plus - in a way, simply.. no artifice to make it overtly dramatic. Could read this poem start to finish over and over- and.feel happily, peacefully at home. Many thanks for sharing, Addie Sinclair.