My heart is breaking

this was for my fiancé Adam. I wrote this cause I was hurting.

When my heart breaks I fall to pieces,

You destroyed me,

you broke me into a million pieces.

I am shattered,

I am in pain.

Why did you hurt me?

why did you lie to me?

These questions still remained unanswered

As I wait for Thursday night.

For you to call me

So I can figure out what you want.

I hope you want to be with me still

I love you, I miss you.

I know you have broke me

But I still love you...

So please stay

As my heart is breaking

I'm crying out for you

I never want to lose you

Tell me now

As my heart is breaking.

Author's Note

This was because I was going thru somethings with Adam.. I am still in love with him

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Only with time does the pain of a true love lost lessen. Only with time. a sad write and the first time a heart is broken is always the hardest to fathom and the most painful. like a dream it's broken.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

My dear little Wordsmith,
You have bloomed into such a beautiful little artist. I am impressed really, I didn't know you had so much talent with writing. It must run in the family, obviously! Lol!

In all seriousness, you did an excellent job conveying the pain, that little butt head, made you feel. In fact, this piece made me want to cry. I am so very proud of you. A few grammatical mistakes, but you are learning and growing into a wonderful writer.

I love you Little Sister!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Thank you Ash'e. Ireally appreciate your review. I just get my writing from you. you know you are a big inspiration to me. I love you and thank you for helping me grow in to an artist! lol

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Anytime little Sis... I appreciate you saying I am an inspiration, You are an inspiration to me as well. Taking car of you through the years had made me a better person. I love you!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

awe! I love you too mommy!!

[Double T]

This is some great stuff you got here. It is good to a good poem with some heart to it and meaning. :)

writing 5/5
meaning 5/5
theme 5/5

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

wow.. thank you double T. I greatly appreciate it. Thank you for your time and your very kind review!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Your poem is nice, don't worry true love always finds a way!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

thank you for the review and the advice as well as your time. I really appreciate it.. :D

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome most :)

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

:) Thank you

[Riddhi]

Hope that things will turn better..Take care.... and beautifully expressed this feelings....Keep it up ...

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

well thank you so much for your kind review. ANd it did work out. thank you so much for your time!

[Willard Wells]

I wish you the best in love and life. May your hopes and dreams be met with your love. Very painful work, but good for the soul. I have one spot that I will mention and understand it I feel works either way, but it was the only thing that went bump in my head. :)

"I know you have broke me" to "I know you have broken me" or "I know you broke me". It may just be me since your work is beautiful. Peace be with you going forward in your life.

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

well thank you so much. People like you are what help me mold more into a great writer. ANd yes Me and my fiancé are ok. We had a little misunderstanding and we made it into a big one. I am learning to talk more about it and be more calm when It comes to things. But thank you again for your very kind and generous review! Peace and love to you! :)

[Willard Wells]

Advice on love, welcomed or not and of life. Words spoken in anger are seldom the truth when spewed out in a rage. People avoid a discussion and just start cutting each other up in the most hurtful way. If a calm respectful discussion cannot be had, love is lost. And don't be afraid to say your sorry, even if maybe your are right. Peace out young lady.

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

thank you so much for the advice. I really needed that. that gave me a new perspective on love and life. thank you again so very much. May god bless you!

[Avinash]

Hope and wish things turn out for better.

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

yes they did. Thank you for the review. It was all a misunderstanding. We worked it out and we are moving on from it together! :)

[Stan Lee]

ah, matters of the heart. nothing has inspired so much poetry or created as much drama. Hope things got better.

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

yes they did. thank you for your very kind review. It was all just a misunderstanding and we worked it out and we are ready to start the future! Much love to you! :)

[Luna Chan]

did yall break up tess? if he did break up with u, ill kick his a*s.

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

No we are still together. it was all just a big huge misunderstanding. I wrote this out of pain and emotion. he is very hurt knowing he had me this hurt to write like this. I also wrote suicide poems as well. No we moved past this and we are planning on making the future better.. and thank you for your review. love you sissy!

[Luna Chan]

Tess u had me scared! I love u a lot and I hope ur okay

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

im so sorry that I had you scared. And yes I am ok. I will hopefully get to see Adam Friday. I miss him and he misses me. I love you sissy! but I am ok!

[Luna Chan]

good i love u too and be careful hun!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

thank you. And I will. I love you sis :D

[Luna Chan]

love you too darling! XD

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

I love you more sis. And happy birthday to you beautiful!

[Luna Chan]

Thx baby girl I love u so much!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

I love you so much more! :P

[Luna Chan]

lol well that isnt up for debate now is it?

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

lol.. yea I am ready to debate now.. lol

[Luna Chan]

Lol sweetie that doesn't matter. U know I love u so much and if u need anything, I'm never far away

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

well thank you so very much! I love you sissy!

[Luna Chan]

I love u too baby girl just be careful

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

ok. I will :D

[zunie frost]

this poem is really awsome !!!! but i an left with some question . what was gonna happen that thursday night ? any way the work is really great !!! i have hysterical time reading it !!!
So please stay
As my heart is breaking
Im crying out for you
I never want to lose you
Tell me now
As my heart is breaking.
these lines are outstanding !!! but there is a mistake .... " it should be i'm instead of im " any way it's just a minor mistake !!! your poetry is great
keep working and keep it coming

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

thank you so much for your review. Honestly when I wrote this I was hurting and going thru some trouble and pain with my fiancé. But we worked it out and I am happy again. I didn't care about the spell mistakes. I only cared how I felt at that moment. Thank you again for your review. I greatly appreciate it. Take care!

[zunie frost]

You are right spell mistake doesn't matter the only thing that mattes is emotion,simplicity and flow

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

yes! that is so true! I honestly wasn't thinking bout that when I was writing it. but now that I am no longer upset I will go in and fix it. thank you again for your review

[zunie frost]

no worries !!!! i always makes many many mistakes !!!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

alright. Could you please take a looksee and see if I fixed all the mistakes and if it makes more sense now. thank you!

[zunie frost]

There are no mistakes now but still feels like something missing try to make rhymes and flow !i might not be right but thats just my opnion

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

oh ok. thank you for your time. I will try to mess with it so more. lol

[zunie frost]

That's good but i must admit the theme of the poew was really deep

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

well thank you so much