Only with time does the pain of a true love lost lessen. Only with time. a sad write and the first time a heart is broken is always the hardest to fathom and the most painful. like a dream it's broken.
My dear little Wordsmith,
You have bloomed into such a beautiful little artist. I am impressed really, I didn't know you had so much talent with writing. It must run in the family, obviously! Lol!
In all seriousness, you did an excellent job conveying the pain, that little butt head, made you feel. In fact, this piece made me want to cry. I am so very proud of you. A few grammatical mistakes, but you are learning and growing into a wonderful writer.
Thank you Ash'e. Ireally appreciate your review. I just get my writing from you. you know you are a .. read moreThank you Ash'e. Ireally appreciate your review. I just get my writing from you. you know you are a big inspiration to me. I love you and thank you for helping me grow in to an artist! lol
8 Years Ago
Anytime little Sis... I appreciate you saying I am an inspiration, You are an inspiration to me as w.. read moreAnytime little Sis... I appreciate you saying I am an inspiration, You are an inspiration to me as well. Taking car of you through the years had made me a better person. I love you!
This is some great stuff you got here. It is good to a good poem with some heart to it and meaning. :)
writing 5/5
meaning 5/5
theme 5/5
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
wow.. thank you double T. I greatly appreciate it. Thank you for your time and your very kind review.. read morewow.. thank you double T. I greatly appreciate it. Thank you for your time and your very kind review!
I wish you the best in love and life. May your hopes and dreams be met with your love. Very painful work, but good for the soul. I have one spot that I will mention and understand it I feel works either way, but it was the only thing that went bump in my head. :)
"I know you have broke me" to "I know you have broken me" or "I know you broke me". It may just be me since your work is beautiful. Peace be with you going forward in your life.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
well thank you so much. People like you are what help me mold more into a great writer. ANd yes Me a.. read morewell thank you so much. People like you are what help me mold more into a great writer. ANd yes Me and my fiancé are ok. We had a little misunderstanding and we made it into a big one. I am learning to talk more about it and be more calm when It comes to things. But thank you again for your very kind and generous review! Peace and love to you! :)
Advice on love, welcomed or not and of life. Words spoken in anger are seldom the truth when spewed .. read moreAdvice on love, welcomed or not and of life. Words spoken in anger are seldom the truth when spewed out in a rage. People avoid a discussion and just start cutting each other up in the most hurtful way. If a calm respectful discussion cannot be had, love is lost. And don't be afraid to say your sorry, even if maybe your are right. Peace out young lady.
8 Years Ago
thank you so much for the advice. I really needed that. that gave me a new perspective on love and l.. read morethank you so much for the advice. I really needed that. that gave me a new perspective on love and life. thank you again so very much. May god bless you!
yes they did. Thank you for the review. It was all a misunderstanding. We worked it out and we are m.. read moreyes they did. Thank you for the review. It was all a misunderstanding. We worked it out and we are moving on from it together! :)
ah, matters of the heart. nothing has inspired so much poetry or created as much drama. Hope things got better.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
yes they did. thank you for your very kind review. It was all just a misunderstanding and we worked .. read moreyes they did. thank you for your very kind review. It was all just a misunderstanding and we worked it out and we are ready to start the future! Much love to you! :)
did yall break up tess? if he did break up with u, ill kick his a*s.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
No we are still together. it was all just a big huge misunderstanding. I wrote this out of pain and .. read moreNo we are still together. it was all just a big huge misunderstanding. I wrote this out of pain and emotion. he is very hurt knowing he had me this hurt to write like this. I also wrote suicide poems as well. No we moved past this and we are planning on making the future better.. and thank you for your review. love you sissy!
8 Years Ago
Tess u had me scared! I love u a lot and I hope ur okay
8 Years Ago
im so sorry that I had you scared. And yes I am ok. I will hopefully get to see Adam Friday. I miss .. read moreim so sorry that I had you scared. And yes I am ok. I will hopefully get to see Adam Friday. I miss him and he misses me. I love you sissy! but I am ok!
8 Years Ago
good i love u too and be careful hun!
8 Years Ago
thank you. And I will. I love you sis :D
8 Years Ago
love you too darling! XD
8 Years Ago
I love you more sis. And happy birthday to you beautiful!
8 Years Ago
Thx baby girl I love u so much!
8 Years Ago
I love you so much more! :P
8 Years Ago
lol well that isnt up for debate now is it?
8 Years Ago
lol.. yea I am ready to debate now.. lol
8 Years Ago
Lol sweetie that doesn't matter. U know I love u so much and if u need anything, I'm never far away
this poem is really awsome !!!! but i an left with some question . what was gonna happen that thursday night ? any way the work is really great !!! i have hysterical time reading it !!!
So please stay
As my heart is breaking
Im crying out for you
I never want to lose you
Tell me now
As my heart is breaking.
these lines are outstanding !!! but there is a mistake .... " it should be i'm instead of im " any way it's just a minor mistake !!! your poetry is great
keep working and keep it coming
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you so much for your review. Honestly when I wrote this I was hurting and going thru some trou.. read morethank you so much for your review. Honestly when I wrote this I was hurting and going thru some trouble and pain with my fiancé. But we worked it out and I am happy again. I didn't care about the spell mistakes. I only cared how I felt at that moment. Thank you again for your review. I greatly appreciate it. Take care!
8 Years Ago
You are right spell mistake doesn't matter the only thing that mattes is emotion,simplicity and flow.. read moreYou are right spell mistake doesn't matter the only thing that mattes is emotion,simplicity and flow
8 Years Ago
yes! that is so true! I honestly wasn't thinking bout that when I was writing it. but now that I am .. read moreyes! that is so true! I honestly wasn't thinking bout that when I was writing it. but now that I am no longer upset I will go in and fix it. thank you again for your review
8 Years Ago
no worries !!!! i always makes many many mistakes !!!
8 Years Ago
alright. Could you please take a looksee and see if I fixed all the mistakes and if it makes more se.. read morealright. Could you please take a looksee and see if I fixed all the mistakes and if it makes more sense now. thank you!
8 Years Ago
There are no mistakes now but still feels like something missing try to make rhymes and flow !i migh.. read moreThere are no mistakes now but still feels like something missing try to make rhymes and flow !i might not be right but thats just my opnion
I'm Nikki Cobain's little sister. My real name is Tessa Danielle Nordyke.. I'm not much of a writer but I do love to read... I am 15 years old & I enjoy reading, walking, & studying about animals... I.. more..