Deadly Illusion

Throw your gaze to the wind.

Let there be no confusion.

My mad heart still can't take,

Love, The deadly illusion!

 

This death needs calm waters,

To rest its madness within,

My heart! A wounded sea,

The most infectious lesion.

 

Let wind soothe your beauty,

Your tears will find some solace.

As they burn both our hearts,

Weeping down your lilac face.

 

Don't deem this heartlessness,

A hurt rose fond of mourning,

There's an apocalypse,

'Neath every silent warning.

 

A man you seek, fine lady.

An ocean to hold your seas,

A place where all your seeds,

Will bloom into fruitful trees.

 

I can see the cluster,

Within your diamond eyes,

I feel your warm pulse,

Flaming my cherry-red prize

 

But now my waves are mad,

My wallow is rather deep

First dancing hurricanes,

Then on a disaster we’ll weep.

Author's Note

This was inspired by Sye, Noodlehead.

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

Ahhhhh this is a refreshing write! From first stanza to last it it full of passion - and the boldness of your word choice is where you show it best. Your rhyming is sporadic which I like, as it is more tender and less so a children's rhym as couplets and such often sound! Some parts I had to reiterate to grasp the flow, but then nothing is ever read the same way twice so it's not a huge issue. :) "I can see the cluster within your diamonds eyes", I love this imagery in particularly. It reminds me of something I'd have written myself heehee. Keep up the good writing Adam, :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you for your outstanding review, Willow
I am much glad you liked it.

[icelandicblue]

A poem that sounds of yore. You've written a lyrical and lovely poem here.

But now my waves are mad,
My wallow is rather deep
First dancing hurricanes,
Then on a disaster we’ll weep.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you.
I am much glad you liked it.

[Sami Khalil]

She is a starlet and her light is an inspiration to others...That was wonderful...:).......

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).............

[Angel]

Our sweet little Noodle...yes, she is like a little star.
I like this piece. I like the wild feel of it...
The sea is treacherous...gentle, warm, healing waters one second...then, before you know it, hurricane!!!
This is a fascinating piece...

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Angel.
I am much humbled.

[s y e]

Angel's a gem...

[Angel]

And Noodle makes me sparkle...

[s y e]

And I love Angel! ♥

[Angel]

A sweet little mutual admiration society...

[Rita L. Sev]

This is beautiful; I love your use of nature imagery, both turbulent and gentle. Well penned!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I am much humbled, Senorita.
thank you.

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱ (Noodlehead)
Definitely prim and trim with passion. Minju, if the sea is this rough - next time take a flight ? Let your heart soar. :)

And yes, a woman's tears are precious indeed. She should save them for the rescue of her lover.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you very much.
I am searching for a ticket and a destination at the moment.

[dw817]

Umm .. ?? Perhaps choose a destination before you have a ticket to get there ? :)

[Alice] (inquiring) "Would you tell me, please, which way I ought to go from here ?"
[Chesire] (grinning) "That depends a good deal on where you want to get to."
[Alice] (off-handedly) "Well I don't much care where -"
[Chesire] (interrupting) "Then it doesn't much matter which way you go."
[Alice] (serious) "… so long as I get somewhere."
[Chesire] (starting to vanish) "Oh, you're sure to do that, if only you walk long enough ..."

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Although I am notice in the game of love. I am starting to believe that I better stray in this path. Having a destination is rather useless.

[dw817]

Depends. I need milk. I'm going to the grocery store. That's my destination. But yes - wandering in the world is a bit like reaching. It's sometimes never quite so satisfying as having reached something in life as it is to be continuously reaching for it. The journey is the reward. :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Exactly! the journey is the reward.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this...a passionate love poem turned into a storm of upheaval and waves too strong for the relationship to withstand...

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Jacob.
I've been absent for some time, and your valuable comment is one of the things I missed!

[s y e]

Wow, was this by one of my writes? I am blown away, your writing has always been amazing, you know I have been a fan.

I loved the wording here, and you have some lines that jumped out at me

"A man you seek, fine lady.
An ocean to hold your seas,
A place where all your seeds,
Will bloom into fruitful trees."

-- My prince charming I am thinking, aha. I have many years before I meet him, LOL. Still dreaming here. I am so touched Adam, this is beautiful -- I am so thrilled I inspired this write.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Your poem "Illusion" inspired me to pen this bleed.

Thank you very much
I am glad you liked it!

[s y e]

Aaaaah, very nice. I am so blown away, you have me so speechless. It is amazing, Adam. I cannot thank you enough. Wow.