Sonnet XVI – The caress of Keres (Part II)

Part II of the series... A panic attack!!

Was it a dream? And these marks on my hands,

Are they real or am I neurotic?

Lost and besotted in an impish trance,

My jaded mind, ill and chaotic

 

Behind mythic bars and ill-omened dreams

I bucked for freedom from my fantasies

But it’s a cursed well and it doesn’t seem

That my unredeemed soul would know release

 

I beat about for a glimpse of burst hope

And on my chaos- anguished sense I set

But I can’t help but to panic and mope

Will any light from my window emit?

 

Then Hypnos’s spell overrides my eyes

And my moribund conscious lays and dies

Reviews

[KeeD]

Loved your word choice and the way you describe a panic attack you almost make it sound hauntingly beautiful

[Dalia]

Will any light from my window emit?



Then Hypnos’s spell overrides my eyes

And my moribund conscious lays and dies

Well done, amazing structure and well expressed.

[s y e]

Woah! I loved this!! Very well written!!
'I bucked for freedom from my fantasies
But it’s a cursed well and it doesn’t seem'
One word: WOW. I liked those lines!!! Well worded.
Nice ending too!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thanks, Sye
Or maybe I should call you, "the princess of high heels" :P

[s y e]

Haha, that'll do me! xP woop

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

Nice one , i like it so much Adam :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Dalia :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

>_< Dalia ??? :'(

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

OMG!! Sorry, I thought you are Dalia... Was so tired that day, sorry!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Its ok :) salamtak adam , ma tshof shar ya rab.

[DarkRainbowPie]

Love the ending, I can hear Vincent Price dragging out those last two lines perfectly, haha x'D

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

LOL Thank you :)

[DarkRainbowPie]

No bother ^_^

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

read part I it will help you get the idea!

[WingsToFly]

Very good

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you! :)

[rnuff]

like this, there is some truth in this

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you! :)

[Monster ^.^]

Oh my, true, the idea seems to be alike to my Confusion and Doubt! Hahaha, nice one! :D

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

thank you :)