Sonnet XV – Eschaton

Thunder, thunder, growl of wrathful god

Mourning of spiteful burning sky

The hollering, loud, lightening marauds

Striking dread from the lord up high

 

When dire lightening flicks the ground

Heralds storming paranormal fright

Then the thunder’s villainous sound

Marks Doomsday with its final smite

 

Eight angels carrying God’s throne

Descend from the dead blazing skies

Creation with horror are blown

Time to pay for your sins and lies

 

Then god’s just scales are set on earth

And all secret he will unearth

Author's Note

I know this is not an ordinary sonnet!
This has an 8 syllables per line
also written on Trochaic tetrameter

Feedback is much appreciated!
Btw, this would be the lyrics of our new song :)
Maybe with slight adjustments

Reviews

[sue]

I dont know about sonnets and stuff and just write what is my head but loved the electricity in this poem.

[Dalia]

Fabulous, dark and gloomy as the theme apply to.
great job, good choice of font.
and what a song that would be ! would love to hear indeed.

[WingsToFly]

Great work :)

[Lonesome Traveler]

Wow, so dark and and forboding, and for that reason rather soothing and mellow, or is that just in my messed up brain? Nice work.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

LOL thank you! :)

[s y e]

Nice! I like it. I love the font! Very cool and chilling.
Loved the third stanza, loved it all to be honest! ≧✯◡✯≦

[DarkRainbowPie]

Very nicely done ^_^ Got to say my favourite stanza is the third one, great write :)

[Monster ^.^]

The end of the world in a sonnet. Sweeet.

[rnuff]

WOW this is really amazing,
love the rhyme scheme.

[Ruth]

Oh, I like this! :) My kinda theme lol
Wondefully woven and great structure!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

You are always welcome! thanks :)

[Ruth]

Most welcome too :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Btw, this would be the lyrics of our new song :)

[Ruth]

Nice! Power surge ;)