Sonnet XIII - The caress of Keres ( Part I )

A tale of macabre... Await part 2

In a forlorn night upon my dim bed

I laid my cadaver to seek some rest

When Keres surfaced and bedamned my head

I arouse in incubus amid mist

 

Horrendous nightmare in abyssal kingdom

With effluent of damn souls drown in blood

Soaring fiends in bods of wicked children

And rustling pythons then hiss and scud

 

I strolled and clamored an outlet

When I heard her sound like demons’ growling

‘You will rot in this bloodcurdling pit’

She cried, held my throat and snubbed my bidding

 

I snapped awake with a script on my hand

‘You’ve two days to live, then your soul is damned’

Author's Note

Unleashing the darker sides of my Gothic poetry... Please tell me what you think?

Reviews

[WingsToFly]

Great. You are good at your stuff. :-)

[KeeD]

My cup of tea, this writing, I love it!
I like to indulge in writing this dark generic style but I can never do it with such excellence and poetic control. Great job

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you again, Keegan
You always over-flatter me
but trust me with reading and practice you can surpass

[s y e]

That's creepy but I quite like it. Nicely written. Good job!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Noodle :)
I am humbled

[s y e]

Anytime, hun!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think i have this dream almost every night...maybe that is why i get so little sleep and why when i do wake up...there is blood on my pillow.

jacob

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

that sounds freaky, Jacob... and to be honest I once had a series of dreams I rather keep to myself, because I highly doubt anyone might believe me

[Em]

Alright, this is freaking great. I love it.
The last two lines are my favorite.
awesome piece.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, Em!
:)