Sonnet IV – Time

A way to look at life, death, and time...

A storm took a Nightingale from the sky,

It tumbled on an oak and its wings broke,

But it hid amid leaves till time passed by,

As its wings healed and flew off the Holm oak.

 

A blizzard blew hard inside a wolf’s eye

And the frozen tears shrouded its blurred sight

But it rested and died as time got by

And its cold fur glittered with stars at night

 

Time could be fatal, and could be healing

The mighty from trivial blows might wither

Yet from calamities survives the weakling

And none would live upon this earth forever

 

Our names are written on the note of death

And he’s deceiving, so treasure each breath

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

Time could be fatal, and could be healing

The mighty from trivial blows might wither

Yet from calamities survives the weakling

And none would live upon this earth forever



Our names are written on the note of death

And he’s deceiving, so treasure each breath


Powerful and amazing :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thanks, Hadeel
glad you find them so

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[alltheloveabove]

I really love this poem! The imagery is stunning.

[Tarry Franck]

Love it - love the message you are sending :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Glad you liked it :)

[Tarry Franck]

:)

[J. J. Nightingale]

For each one there is an appointed time ..
Live as if this is your last day ..

I like your style, and the message .. Jazz

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, I am humbled

[J. J. Nightingale]

:).......

[†Tracey†]

What do I think... ? wow.. I love this.. and again you capture our attention and then slam it home with your last stanza's.. I love that..x

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you! I am humbled indeed

[Lonesome Traveler]

Certainly makes you think. We live, we die. In the end thats all it ever is.
Those last two lines just capture the feeling so well. "note of death" has endless dark and beautiful connotations.
Keep it up

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you! I am humbled

[Lonesome Traveler]

Well you write good sonnets!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you very much!

[sue]

wow certainly makes me think although I do know when the time comes its as it will be. Great write.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Indeed! Thank you again

[LA Lorena]

I like this sonnet of yours very much. Can't help but wonder though if perhaps you didn't drop those 2 lines on purpose in the hopes that Summer would have to bend over to pick them up? LOL. I'm too cheeky for a Sunday morning, I know.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

o.O You have a really dirty mind!! LOL
Thank you though!

[LA Lorena]

I do not! Just like having fun!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

LOL! ;) kidding!

[Muse]

What are the rules of a sonnet? I think I'm inspired to write one.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I am honored you say that

14 lines, 4 stanzas, with a strict (4,4,4,2) lines format
read moreI am honored you say that

14 lines, 4 stanzas, with a strict (4,4,4,2) lines format
and a strict rhyme scheme (abab cdcd efef gg) also it must be on the iambic pentameter (5 feet per line)
it has strict rules but i adore it... Needs some practice

[Muse]

I'm a geniune rule breaker..too many rules I say! But thank you...will copy this down...disciplined writing might be good for this Muse.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I believe poetry to be a sacred art... dont view them as rules, consider them road signs to present a masterpiece... :)
I dislike free verse and honestly rarely consider it poetry, as everything fine, mastering poetry takes time and effort, personal opinion!

[Muse]

but that would like be saying there are rules in creating a fine painting. Structure can be boring.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

of course there are rules :)
you have to learn and practice tons before you paint a masterpiece

still though no one said you have to follow a tight lane and norm
poetry rules are quite flexible and when you learn them, you'll discover so

[Muse]

Pardon me...as I skip to my own drum..and seem to do just fine. :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I respect! its a matter of opinions :)

[Muse]

I agree to disagree. ha

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The devil's in the details of this write. You have weaved an intriguing Sonnet. Truly haunting and beautiful in its darkness.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Your testimony i hold dearly
thank you

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Thank you for writing it...and for your kind words. :)