Was it worth?

Inspired by the endless wars humanity has gotten itself into throughout this mundane existence

Aurora breathes… At scythes riving carmine moans.

Men fight… Acclaim rights, do they really own?

Grenades and guns… On the run like an acid rain.

Knelling knolls… Killing souls in a blemished vain.

 

Not a slight… dim insight of why they go.

They were told… To unfold a tearing roar!

Men of tin… Full of sin ram the blind ruck.

Behind walls… Watching souls by death are struck!

 

Wise survives… Strong dies in horrid dismay.

As they beg… Amid mist for sign of bay.

Marching on… Going on ‘neath crumbling sky.

Mors eye… Shall ply all the wishes to die.

Cold bullets… Aim to hit what twitches around.

Falling down… In blood drown as they hit the ground.

Was it worth…? Running forth to your own demise.

Widowed wives… Seething lives of sorrowing brides

Author's Note

Do you agree?

Reviews

[CS]

I am a big fan of the format of this. The first part of each line is like a little burst of thought followed by reason. It really gets the idea across.

That first line is breathtaking, Adam. Wonderful wording that makes a real impact and draws me into the rest of the piece.

I hate war. The damage is creates reaches far beyond any battlefield. Nice work on this, my friend.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I am ever so humbled!
And indeed, its format is the unique thing about it :)
I've been through war myself, and I know the extant of it
Lost almost everything through it

[rnuff]

oh wow this is completely amazing, there is part I would rebuttle with, BUt I love the write, I really love the set up and rhyme scheme.

[Riley]

War leaves the entire world with a dark bloody history. This reminds me of that aphorism: "War doesn't decide who's right. It decides who's left..."

Solid expression here. Can feel the tension.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I agree! thank you for your kind and wise words

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Good to know I am not the only Aussie here ;)

[Riley]

Oh, I can list you a number of Aussies here. Great writers, too!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Please do!

[Riley]

I'll message you...

[AK]

Wow! Great poem :) I love your vocabulary. Your punctuation is very effective too. Great theme, I quite agree with you. Keep writing!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you, I am honored

I wrote this 15 minutes ago actually

[AK]

Oh :)