Rhetoric Heretic

 

I am not like you.

 

I am not one to tiptoe

around words and then turn around

and use them to fit

a square peg into a round hole

being dug from the top down

by a triangle spade made of

mixed emotions.

 

I am mistook daily

like a vitamin people have with breakfast

swallowed with their glass half-full

of half-empty pulp-filled concept juice

sent down a gullet then forgotten about

until the time comes to let go

but by then it’s everyone else’s fault

they’re bloated.

 

I have cut my feet

on the eggshells people leave behind

like a trail of what to follow

while they wallow in wondering

what if they had lived

what if they had just lived one day

outside of themselves and inside

the moment they first wondered where

it all went wrong.

 

I am the poster child

for live and learn until you can no longer live

for we never stop learning

or earning our day’s breath

for it can be taken from us at any point

which makes much of what is lived for

these days very pointless and driven

to mediocre meaning like the death

of a dream.

 

I am not like you

and I am no better or worse than you

I am just trying to get out alive

and trying to look back on my deathbed

sheets made of either satin or sandpaper

but with the belief I did it the way

I needed to do it in order

to be myself.

Reviews

[Hedra Helix]

hah ive been here too;) completely forgot, Good s**t;)

[xlynne]

wow! that was amazing! i LOVED your imagery and how you just came out and said so eloquently and strongly what you felt. i loved most when you said: "I am just trying to get out alive/and trying to look back on my deathbed/sheets made of either satin or sandpaper" those lines just really spoke clear emotion to me. spectacular!

[This Page Does Not Exis..]

Enjoy the straight-to-point imagery... Its also refreshingly masculine...I really, enjoyed this poem...

Its also refreshingly masculine

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is really quite wonderful my dear. i'm really impressed with this piece. it's eloquent, professional, well thought out. really well done

'what if they had livedwhat if they had just lived one dayoutside of themselves and insidethe moment they first wondered whereit all went wrong."

i liked that.. i liked so much of it.

hugs

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

Oh Ad, this is a fantastic piece of writing... i love it - i love the repeat of the line 'i am not like you' and all the images - like the tip toe and eggshells - nicely done!

[Hedra Helix]

Whoo Hoo! 2 goodies in a row;) Man there are some strong lines in there {not that the cohesion wasnt strong as well}

this is glorious, nonrhyme rhyme and textures galore in your thought, language pattern.
So much to learn from, I love it, thanks!

I dig that the first 2 works Ive read of yours have the word 'word' right at the get go, yep keep them priories straight;)

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"I have cut my feet
on the eggshells people leave behind"- Great stuff.

I really enjoyed this Adam! In fact, I would say this is my favorite of your pieces. The capture the thought and emotions behind real, true, conscious acts of rebellion. Well done.

[Wolfwind Words]

We are only ourselves! Great Words! I liked how this was song like, I could imagine it being sung with a guitar strumming in the background. You speak true words. You shall succed in getting out in one piece, with peace in your soul! I know it! :)
Wonderful work of artistic words about the canvas of life!

[Robert Luna]

Amen!!!!! Adam we have to please no one but ourselves. We find that people that are honest and straight up have the ability to be real people and not just another plastic copy. I say be yourself I know I am glad to see him and to know him. You are a great friend that will stand by a person to the bitter end. There are not alot of people like you left out there.

Rock On!!!!!!

[The Autumn Faerie]

We all have things in which we must partake in order to remain ourselves. It's fascinating, really, if you think about it. I liked the analogies you used in here, like with the walking upon the eggshells. That was particularly interesting. Good work!