Rape

He takes off her clothes,
and pushes her on her bed,
she trys to scream,
noone hears her,
he kisses her,
and runs his hands over her,
She trys to escape,
but he is to strong,
he shoves his man hood in,
and starts pounding her hard,
she yells get off,
but he just slaps her,
he finishes and gets off,
telling her to not tell or she will pay,
she curls in a ball,
wondering what she did to desserve this.

Reviews

[}Echo{]

This is very relateable... It made me cry... Nicely written...

[Sophie]

Quite graphic, but not as graphic as it could be, thank god. There was so much emotion in this, I really have to admire how in such a short poem you managed to stuff all the sadness and pain into it. Well done.

[Destiny]

right to the point with a deep message

[zero binty]

I fear reading about violence, especially towards females. There is a sorrow within me that always wells up into a rage. Just being able to write about it, you have shown your growing power. Very good piece.

[Melinda Weber]

When writing about rape, you really have to hit points from the angle of the abused... there is a typo here.. "she shoves his man hood in," i think you meant "he?"

try branching out in the words that give emotion, it adds affect and impact to the piece. But this is a good start, keep experimenting and writing :)