In this world where Beyonce and Lady Gaga become the true standard of beauty
so when they wear a pair of shoes or a scarf with a skirt, everybody has to have it
just to be welcome in the 12 day club where style and the idea of self changes
(can change) after the second week begins to close. Where young black girls
complement each other for a nice weave instead of a nice disposition. Where
young men are comforted by large, shiny rims but cant walk safely to the corner
of their own block. Your so correct, let us not live in mediocracy and especially
not that thats defined by some other poor souls. Good work. hder.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you very much! And I agree with you wholeheartedly!
I can see why this poem has such supportive reviews. I am of like mind.
I love the word play and the rhythm and even how you structured the lengths of the lines of the poem. I've always been intrigued and appalled by how powerful an influence the media has over the general populace, even when the media popularizes the most outrageous ideals - standards and practices that, ordinarily, we would reject with a great deal of disgusted noise and wild gesticulations.
But you're absolutely correct: we give up our control to the media. Whatever /is/ is what the media wants it to be. A small, select group of people with a great deal of political/economic/etc. influence dictates the things we want, need, do, think. I love how you contrasted "mediocracy" with other forms of government, because it /is/ a system of government in its own right. It's frightening how much power one body can wield.
This is a short review I leave, and there isn't much constructive criticism in it, I admit. x3 But I don't see anything that needs to be changed - except, perhaps, the missing apostrophe in line six, but poetic license grants us all certain liberties with the English language, as you know. x3
On a final note, I just wanted to point out how similar "mediocracy" and "mediocrity" sound, which is only natural, I suppose. Maybe I'm just pointing out the obvious, but I'm amused by such things...
And now I'm just rambling. But know that I enjoyed reading this poem and the points you brought forth; I sincerely hope you continue sharing more of your work with the rest of us! So keep going, and happy writing! :)
-Mina
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Wow thank you very much! Your outlook on these things is very similar to mine!
really good:) its really true that most of what our society is is what the media dictates:/ appearance and popularity are most of what matters when indivituality and originality should be more important. personally it would be great if people acted more individual! love the poem Ace! great job! really:)
I love it! And completely agree. Trend is all that seems to matter anymore in this world. People seem to lack morals, their own individual views, any sense of dignity, and so many other things, that If I started ranting now, I'd probably still be ranting tomorrow. This was a thought provoking piece. Very nice.
Just another aspiring writer.
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