Unbelievable

How unbelievable was arrested

Once a demon challenge me by saying that he was from the most powerful government because he couldn't get caught and that he was invisible and that his name was "unbelievable" because if I was to tell persons about him then other persons will not believe me, so what I did next time he tried to appear, I put super glue inside a glass jar and the fumes attracted and glued the demon inside the jar. Now the fumes glued the demon inside the jar and different images form inside the jar.

Reviews

[Linda alexander]

Excellent way of presentation, very clever write too, at times it is hard to make people see the truth when it involves the particular identity which is unbelievable, I want to now the after math if unbelievable escapes from the job, you need way more brain unless everyone accepted the truth and accepted you, enjoyed

[NoelHC]

Interesting tale, I would like to see this expand a bit more. Maybe a dialogue between "Unbelievable" and the heroine.
This has the beginnings of a fairy tale feel to it, and maybe would work well in a format such as that.
It piqued my curiosity. I want more of it.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

What happened is when I put them in that jar they said they were mayans and that their objective was to annoy persons because that was the way to carve souls persons are angry, that they were collecting and carving souls because they were creating a parallel universe in a far away place for extra terrestrials, sort of similar to clones so that they could control humanity as puppets from a distance.

[McKinleyA]

Hah, I don't know why, but the thought of a little devil getting stuck in a jar full of glue makes me smile. The illustrations are of a good quality. Did you edit them or create them?

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I decided not to upload the photo of the real jar with the little demon in it instead I uploaded an art version of what I used to put them in there, but the way they try to deceive persons is that they claim that everything is theirs and they repeat it so many times to intentionaly create doubt and what I noticed is that demons do not have magical powers and they can not read the future, what they do is they manipulate persons, before they were put in that jar they told me "tomorrow a person is going to knock at your door" and then the following day when I looked at the surveillance cameras I saw them telling a person on their ear to go do that, and if a person believes any of their lies then they try to take over the person which is their objective to use lies to manipulate persons, for example they say that they told me how to put them in that jar and to release them, which they are lying because I had to try so many times to put them in that jar, and all those times I was trying, they were also trying for me to give up and I never did.

[Wynter Ignatius]

My demons have names too - Self Doubt, Paranoia, Fear, Confusion, Trepidation, etc.

Clever little piece.

Would be interesting to see this played with a bit more and turned into something else. Metaphors speak volumes under layers of lexicon.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

That is what demons try to do, they try to create all those in persons because all those things affect memory and persons at those points could feel doubt and that is what they want for persons to feel those things so that they can keep carving at those points to try to control persons with lies, many times those demons tried for me to feel that and I never did, I knew that they wanted me to feel anger, and I knew that if I would feel that, then the predicted reaction would had been comfort and I didn't want to loose sight of my target and start all over so I kept trying and they operate in a programming mode that even when they are spotted they keep denying it and is at those moment that I started writing how they were trying to deceive me even when they were in jail in that jar.

[Bluefire]

This is great!
I can see him sitting on a shelf inside that jar, bored out of his mind with no people to trick.
Cleverly executed!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

He is trying all sort of things for me to release him and after I spend much time to arrest him there is no way that he is getting out of prison, that jar when he stops talking is going to be bury with cement. Sometimes he tries to play dead and when I put a religious image near him he starts vomiting all sorts of blasphemy inside the jar.

[Bluefire]

o.o Make sure you don't break the jar when you bury it.
Haha! I can see where it would be quite fun to torment him with the bible or a cross or an angel. XD

[Kamari's]

Comical but you rushed the story try to have more conversation and the angle in the picture was not in the story but maybe I you rewrote it with the angle to tell the girl how to trap the demon it's make more since

[SquinklaPsyOps]

That is what I was thinking last night of what illustrations I could use that resemble the contents of the notes for the chapters, still am at the editing process. I very much appreciate your advice dear writer.

[Kamari's]

Anytime all us writers should help each other in our trade of the pen please review any of my pieces I would enjoy to hear your input

[Illuminatix]

PLEASE give me some of that glue so I can get rid of my Tax PPl haahhaahahaha Love your poem!!!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Having a Tax PPl do your taxes is an allied and is very smart because they keep copies and that gives you peace of mind that you don't have to worry if your computer malfunctions.

[David Scott]

I think his friend "inconceivable"
will be captured soon as well.

I like the playfulness of this deep thought.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

"inconceivable" once tried to fool me into believing that he was a mayan god while the other one kept trying to annoy me, then I said I am tired of those charlatans and I am going to find a way to arrest them

[Lucien Maier]

interesting concept. words are well laid out.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Than you, demons try to fool persons at the moments, if a fly enters your house then they try to deceive the person into thinking that they had something to do with it, that is when I decided to arrest them and write about the tactics they try to use

[MrElbowman]

I enjoyed the idea of it but the way it was written threw me off many times. There were so many "and he" moments and the trouble was the flow if you could have made it flow more like a story and less like a list of events then it would have been great. It has a very "Grimm Fairy Tale" feel to the story.

Ideas are solid but the execution was lack-luster.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I noticed that, and was waiting to arrest one of them again, and when that happened, I uploaded the details right away live to share the message that could help other persons. I am working on writing it similar as you said, which I do appreciate your detailed advice.

[Shaquana Adams]

Kind of dark, yet cute. Not a combination just anyone can pull off. Nicely done! :)
-QuanaWana

[SquinklaPsyOps]

What had happened is that years before I had spotted a few demons and then I called the guards from hell that some demons had escaped from their prisons and it was very exhausting to convince them to take them to hell, and a few years later when other demons appeared and they challenged me then I said those idiots want to know how I did it before as they spoke a different language, I said to myself I am not going to exhaust my self with those idiots and I have to find a way to destroy them and insert fear in them so that others don't get near and it worked.