Slam Dunk

We are here on earth to help the living, spirits that are lost in the after life is because they didn't want to help themselves while they were alive, and they deserve to be pushed to hell.

The light at the end of the tunnel

Never shines through, for spirits that are lost on earth

Even if the door is open, darkness is in them

They can run but they can't hide

Because they are lost on earth

Waiting to be pushed to hell

Fear the true

Because the light at the end of the tunnel

will never shine for the spirits that are lost on earth.

Author's Note

We are here on earth to help the living, spirits that are lost in the after life is because they didn't want to help themselves while they were alive, and they deserve to be pushed to hell.

Tribute TOL

Reviews

[Raymond Federle]

"Fear the true" awesome line...BRILLIANT! :)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

This is great explanation of a complex concept in stellar subtlety. If I can be useful in this review and suggest something worth considering as a change, I would only think of changing the last line. It feels like it is too soon to me. I would say, "will never shine," but then instead of "for the spirits that are lost on earth," instead I would say something that describes the same thing in different words, like "these star-crossed souls."

[Amduscia]

There is great insight in this Poem of Yours. A very depthful, well thought out piece of Poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like a ghost whisperer---but the discomforted spirits will never find comfort, for they have made their bed...

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Excellent valuable interpretation, Thank you.

[PANTHER]

The light at the end of the tunnel is a fast moving freight. Personally I choose to do the driving rather than to hop a ride. So spirits dwell just wait for hell or get on board I'm headed for the lord. Great write Psy of the landscape passing by.

[Patrick O'Neil]

Wow, deep stuff, keep going would like to hear more of your thoughts on the subject.

[KAin]

Embedded in the words is another story - a question of honour and whether virtue is worth the effort. I can't give an objective answer there. Is it worth it to do the right thing, no matter the situation, no matter the cost to the self? I believe it is... Can we take all the hatred of the world and shoulder it for the sake of others? Being true to the self is rare. It doesn't help that people are terrified of themselves. Nice work, friend.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well this sounds like you are speaking of limbo.The time where a spirit decides if to cross over and accept their judgement or cower in nothingness.Well written interesting concept

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for your valuable interpretation, I like this part "The time where a spirit decides if to cross over and accept their judgement or cower in nothingness." I like it because it says that when spirits die they could feel fear, and could develop continuation for novel from there.

Thank you again Vidya Bacchus, your review is very useful.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome:)

[Bluefire]

Very unique. It seems centered around the time of judgment, right between life and death where the spirit's fate is decided.
Very well done! ^^

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for your valuable review. I was trying to aim at the spirits that are supposedly lost on earth after they die, got the idea from parents that claimed that the school children's restroom was haunted and that they could hear voices in there, so started wondering what type of lost spirits would want to scare little kids in school restrooms and what was their intentions.

Were they trying to make a memory imprint in them, so that they could come back later on in their lifes through their memory subconscious and tell them, "hey remember when used to scare you when you were little" that way they could be manisfested in them in the future and if longevity was their strategy by them trying to use fear as a tool.

[Bluefire]

That is a very interesting idea, and I believe they do need fear to be seen. Why they would want to be seen, we can only speculate...
I like that story, about the haunted bathroom, it reminds me of a kids book I once read called "The Haunted Toilet" xD

[Scott Metro]

What of the spirit of the Aspen...the Deer...the River ?
I assume you speak of the humans.....

My prayer this year was this..."Give me the wisdom to not curse the blessed nor bless the cursed".
Enjoyed it.
Scott

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you Scott for your valuable feed back, truly appreciate it.

"Give me the wisdom to not curse the blessed nor bless the cursed"

Thank you, again.