Peace Of Mind

Peace Of Mind

Alone in my room

I hear a clock ticking

On a life that could have meaning

I see a million lonely people

Author's Note

Tribute

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

You see the people walking on the street, (maybe a train station)... a huge clock hanging and ticking away the precious time, of their transient lives. A real philosopher you are... :) In a few short brilliant words, you always draw whole mind-scenes to me ;) great work hermana.

- Elisa

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like your interpretation Raven Sis, how you enhanced the small sound of a clock ticking to the almost loudest sound man created which is the whistle of a train and the area which is between the persons that see the clock and hear the loud sound that connects them in an invisible network that exists.

[Coyote Poetry]

A new world today. People afraid to talk. Internet was a two-sided coin. Easy to talk to strangers than to our neighbors. It had became a world of separation. Thank you for the excellent poem and thoughts.
Coyote

[SquinklaPsyOps]

From this part of your review "Easy to talk to strangers than to our neighbors." do you think that happens because our physical neighbors are not writers like us.

[Rees Thomas]

“there is a loneliness in this world so great
that you can see it in the slow movement of
the hands of a clock.

-Charles Bukowski

Good read thankyou

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you, Rees Thomas.

[ron]

"a million lonely people", I seem to be one of them while my own clock keeps ticking. Nice peice. I love your tributes and writing.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I know, ron. You are right, it includes you also, thank you for being part of my world.

[ron]

Thank you for including me in your world :).

[Ankur Sharma]

I like to hear the sound of clock ticking because its the silence the sound represent for me your poem give a picture of that silence to me.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

When my father never wants to tell me who my mother was.

[Prritiy]

short, crisp and to the point with really deep thinking. nice one :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thanks, Prritiy. The color of your dress is awesome.

[Prritiy]

you are welcome dear and thank you so much :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is about when writers are alone writing and they bring to life characters that are lonely waiting to be part of life.

[Shane Mohamed]

A good poignant piece. So brief, yet packed with meaning.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you, Shane Mohamed. My father will probably take away my computer now that I started thinking about my mother.

[Shane Mohamed]

Just call me Shane. It's okay, work and get one on your own, but like I said don't stop till you're there.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Yes, Shane. The good thing is that the live in nannie doesn't speak English, and she doesn't know what I'm typing.

[Shane Mohamed]

You sly devil! lol. Are you half Latino? if you are you're gonna like what I just wrote after reading an article. I just uploaded a new piece. Tell me which side you're on.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I love the catching headline

Damn Republicans
A Poem by Shane Mohamed
" These a******s don't wante get anythin done ... "

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/ShaneMohamed/1208016/

Lets go shake their seats

[Ellie J]

This reminds me of a haiku though I know it doesn't follow the necessary rules of one- it's still a lovely piece of poetry. Keep up the good work of pressing deep feeling into to small, compact spaces. :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you, now I know what a haiku is. I love haiku's.

[DarkestStoryline]

It's a great piece of writing that I can relate to. I like it, great job!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I'm glad you can relate to it, is about when writers are alone writing and they bring to life characters that are lonely waiting to be part of life.

[Dhaye]

A million lonely people...Am I one of them? Maybe for a moment...I don't know. I am still hoping to hold the thing which can make me happy.

Short but meaningful. Nice job!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Lonely people as when writers are alone writing with their characters. Thank you Dhaye, for your valuable feedback.

[K.]

I like this! It's short and sweet and to the point. Great job!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you, your review was helpful.