Peace Of Mind

Peace Of Mind

Alone in my room

I hear a clock ticking

On a life that could have meaning

I see a million lonely people

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[SquinklaPsyOps]

You see the people walking on the street, (maybe a train station)... a huge clock hanging and ticking away the precious time, of their transient lives. A real philosopher you are... :) In a few short brilliant words, you always draw whole mind-scenes to me ;) great work hermana.

- Elisa

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like your interpretation Raven Sis, how you enhanced the small sound of a clock ticking to the almost loudest sound man created which is the whistle of a train and the area which is between the persons that see the clock and hear the loud sound that connects them in an invisible network that exists.

[Avinash]

Simple, Beautiful and Deep.

[ZacCrampton]

There is something to be said for simplicity. I personally love to see something meaningful in short. Sometimes its way more potent than a long drawn out explanation. I definitely appreciate this. Thank you for your work, good job.

[Nami Machae]

There is a simplicity here that I seem to be drawn to. The mood. You have set in just four lines is completely remarkable. I really enjoyed this and wish you best of luck and happiness as. You continue writing. Keep up the good work and I will be reading more (:

[Melanie Genevieve]

wow you did so much here with only 4 lines. Millions of lonely people who's clocks are ticking away, too many people take everything for granted or give up too soon , watch their lives go by, wasting their potential. Im curious to how the title ties in. Is it that these people are content living this way?
Also, I love the clock as a symbol.

Keep it up girlie!

[RainDancer1997]

It's amazing how four lines of words could have so much feeling and meaning:) Good job:)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is about when writers are alone writing and they bring to life characters that are lonely waiting to be part of life.

[Hypnos]

Interesting, I wonder what your inspiration for this piece was. You did a very good job and gave your readers a thought provoking poem. I thank you for sending me the read request so that I could see this wonderful poem.

[Richard Layne]

Interesting thought
The clock is a great symbol and reminder to do something

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Maybe in life is when the clock matters because in the after life it seems images stay still.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

to be honest it didn't mean much to me i didn't really like it sorry.
Although im sure plenty others liked it.
Keep writing :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Don't be sorry, thank you for being honest.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

ur welcome :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

May the force be with you.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks u to :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is about when writers are alone writing and they bring to life characters that are lonely waiting to be part of life.

[Sam]

Love it. So much emotion so raw. It may be only 4 lines but the poem almost goes on. It is amazing what your do capture though the longing to bring such joy to the million lonely people.
Life always has meaning sometimes it just isn't clear though.
Thank you for sharing this was a wonderful read.

[Astro]

To be honest, I think it is incredible kiddo. Those four lines describe a setting, an emotion and pose a question that perhaps we "the millions" are all ticking time down on our own potential, or as a society we are wasting our collective potential. Great stuff, sorry I couldn't read your PsyOps script, I don't speak much Espanol.