Peace Of Mind

Peace Of Mind

Alone in my room

I hear a clock ticking

On a life that could have meaning

I see a million lonely people

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[SquinklaPsyOps]

You see the people walking on the street, (maybe a train station)... a huge clock hanging and ticking away the precious time, of their transient lives. A real philosopher you are... :) In a few short brilliant words, you always draw whole mind-scenes to me ;) great work hermana.

- Elisa

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like your interpretation Raven Sis, how you enhanced the small sound of a clock ticking to the almost loudest sound man created which is the whistle of a train and the area which is between the persons that see the clock and hear the loud sound that connects them in an invisible network that exists.

[Mary Christabel George]

For me how it feels is - You are not the only one in the world who suffers loneliness. There are many. And we still have that life which can be made meaningful.

[Maria]

Wow.I really like this poem it's simple and powerful enough to get the message and the fellings u want to give inside of this poem. Amezing job! I love it!:)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you, it could be about a person that has developed hearing to the point that when is very quiet the person could hear the smallest sound such as a clock ticking and could use that signal to time travel and see people that are almost unnoticed because most persons disregard small details as valuable.

[UseMeAbuseMeCureMe]

I like the shortness of it, its pretty in a simplistic way

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is about when writers are alone writing and they bring to life characters that are lonely waiting to be part of life.

[Michael G. Smith]

You've penned a mood. So you are one of those people that still own a clock with hands, lol.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I know what you are trying to say, the clock could had also been used as a metaphor for technological advancements through time and

"On a life that could have meaning
I see a million lonely people"

could signify on a life that could have mean people, I see them by themselves, because most persons that are into digital will be in their computers isolated and they will be away from persons that can not afford the latest technology, something like that.

[Michael G. Smith]

Honestly I was just curious.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Ohh I get it, I live near a place where they sell something similar to analog technology and the reason I am not into the most modern devices is because they are pressured by advertisements and most persons fall for their expirements at their expense to test them and then they have to continue acquiring their most modern because they could had been brain washed.

[Jennifer McQueen]

Wow. This was such a powerful piece for only four lines. Your imagery was perfect. Excellent job.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is about when writers are alone writing and they bring to life characters that are lonely waiting to be part of life.

[Flowrite]

Knowing we all must be aware of how much time we use living, we can find peace in knowing we’re not alone in experiencing loneliness. I share the same consensus in my piece "Found.” This journey does give me a piece of mind.

[isiah_holmes]

Nice poem, i like the emotion i felt in it. what made you want to write it?

[Bri 810]

I like this. It's short but it's simple and to the point enough to get the message. :)

[RedInk524]

With the growth of technology and the rise of pressured paths for the sake of acceptance, it is all too common to find yourself surrounded in a sea of lonely, self-enchained people treading their stone circles like the hands of a clock. A pity it is... Folding and bending their wings to prevent the flight on their own path all at the will of others. We are all individual beings, all with individual purposes. And so why must we restrain ourselves to following the common bellwethers along the path of self depreciation and belittlement? Simple- STUPIDITY! The peace of mind that i feel you are portraying is either the sadistic (yet gorgeous) enjoyment of other people's wasting of themselves, or the fact that you are aware of the waste of life and are happily content in treading your own path without worry of rejection as everyone should do. A grenade this poem is, and i appreciate you pulling the pin and lobbing it at our faces. Btw, any stretch or flex looks badass if you hold a grenade... try it!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Yes, the poem was intended for the writers at the network, it says that I am not alone, that I am part of a group that shares the same dreams. The people that are willing to write what they are going through and by doing so they climb.

And you're right about technology changing every day and other people depreciating is value by being anxious for the next breakthrough, when all we writers need is a word processor in any period of time, and that gives us peace of mind.

Thank you for your interpretation, I greatly appreciate it.

[ayosonolowo]

Very impressive
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nice piece
keep it up