Dear Sister

Dedicated to my Dear Sister

You are an angel in disguise.

You are intelligent and wise.

Having a sister like you is a gift

Sometimes between us there’s a split.

 

I treasure the moments that we’d laugh together

I try to shoot jokes to make you feel better

Whether it’s a silly joke or corny

You laugh at them to make me happy

 

I share my secrets, coz’ you understand me

You shared yours, coz’ you trust me.

You are always there for me

Good times and bad time.

If I’m not there- please forgive me-

With you when you need me.

 

Whether it’s s silly joke or about that person in the corner

You’re open to me, which I honor.

That smiles and frowns on your picture I treasure

Stays there on your face forever I make sure.

I regret for the moments that we fight

Coz’ I believe that you are right.

 

May be our promises will fade

But sure in my heart you will hide

may be we have fight in many way

But couldn’t have survived life without you along the way

 

If I had one wish, it would surely be

To give you as a sister in my all lives

you’ve been my sunshine in so many ways.

In this world no one is perfect.

But in my world you’re Miss Perfect

 

I am very glad to have you as a sister

You give me tons of laughter

You are the best friend I've ever had.

My gratitude for you has no end.

 

 

Author's Note

Forgive me for the mistakes- Like to get critic reviews to make this more good.- Editing help from- Tabby Mac. Thanks Tabby Mac

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

I love to red tributes to loved ones. Especially siblings because I don’t have any. The thoughts are beautiful! You started off really strong...near the middle I think is where your words are heartfelt but seems like your wrestling between rhyme and the right words to describe your sister. This is a great first draft. I’d reread it a few times. If you rework a few lines it would really keep the momentum going till the end! The one stanza ends with me almost every line. You almost have it! The message is AWESOME! And the heart is definitely there!! I look forward to your revision!
Tabby

[Abraham George]

I appreciate your comments and i wish you give some suggestions. Please help me to make it more good.

[Abraham George]

And i really love sisters because i really don't have one. I really need one and now i have one cute little sister. So i am pouring all my love that i kept these years for a sister towards her.

[Tabby Mac]

That’s lovely! I shall try and give some specifics! I’ll message them to you!
Tabby

[Abraham George]

i am waiting for that.

[Cecelia A. Green]

I have a sister too so I can relate to this very well. Nicely written!!!

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the comment and i'm glad to see you liked.

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem for your sister. Your words kind and generous. I loved the complete poem. Thank you Abraham for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Diane]

I feel the same way for my brother. Since my mama has passed I feel he is all I have left of her. We were always close, but now ever more so. I loved the poem it was sweet.

[Abraham George]

i am happy to know that you loved this . This poem i dedicate to all sisters.

[Elizabeth Mars]

Aww! This is such a sweet poem! The lines are all so kind and heart warming. The overall poem has such a nice soft and sweet tone, I love it so much! There are some lines at feel a little awkward (like the line- "You are the best friend I've ever had") so just re-read and re adjust some of the lines. But overall really lovely poem!

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the constructive comments and i appreciate that. Glad you liked.

[Norah]

Well written and again, I really dig the style.

[Priyanshi]

Wonderful poem, the reading goes on wonderful as i continue...Really loved it.
I really loved it...even I love my sister very much.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for commenting on my work and i'm glad to know that you liked it

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Jackie]

Your tribute is truely heartfelt. And even with the rhyme you haf whole lot of heart in it. I do also notice the change as well. Between "rhyme and best words to describe" i really like that. You should keep that. Wonderful way of putting it as well.any how. Your tribute to your sister was right from the heart and sounded truely passionate.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for stooping by and commenting on my works.

[merit]

sweet poem i personally like free verse, gives more to play with but i find i have to be careful not go ranting ;D

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the comments and reading my work.