Dear Sister

Dedicated to my Dear Sister

You are an angel in disguise.

You are intelligent and wise.

Having a sister like you is a gift

Sometimes between us there’s a split.

 

I treasure the moments that we’d laugh together

I try to shoot jokes to make you feel better

Whether it’s a silly joke or corny

You laugh at them to make me happy

 

I share my secrets, coz’ you understand me

You shared yours, coz’ you trust me.

You are always there for me

Good times and bad time.

If I’m not there- please forgive me-

With you when you need me.

 

Whether it’s s silly joke or about that person in the corner

You’re open to me, which I honor.

That smiles and frowns on your picture I treasure

Stays there on your face forever I make sure.

I regret for the moments that we fight

Coz’ I believe that you are right.

 

May be our promises will fade

But sure in my heart you will hide

may be we have fight in many way

But couldn’t have survived life without you along the way

 

If I had one wish, it would surely be

To give you as a sister in my all lives

you’ve been my sunshine in so many ways.

In this world no one is perfect.

But in my world you’re Miss Perfect

 

I am very glad to have you as a sister

You give me tons of laughter

You are the best friend I've ever had.

My gratitude for you has no end.

 

 

Author's Note

Forgive me for the mistakes- Like to get critic reviews to make this more good.- Editing help from- Tabby Mac. Thanks Tabby Mac

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

I love to red tributes to loved ones. Especially siblings because I don’t have any. The thoughts are beautiful! You started off really strong...near the middle I think is where your words are heartfelt but seems like your wrestling between rhyme and the right words to describe your sister. This is a great first draft. I’d reread it a few times. If you rework a few lines it would really keep the momentum going till the end! The one stanza ends with me almost every line. You almost have it! The message is AWESOME! And the heart is definitely there!! I look forward to your revision!
Tabby

[Abraham George]

I appreciate your comments and i wish you give some suggestions. Please help me to make it more good.

[Abraham George]

And i really love sisters because i really don't have one. I really need one and now i have one cute little sister. So i am pouring all my love that i kept these years for a sister towards her.

[Tabby Mac]

That’s lovely! I shall try and give some specifics! I’ll message them to you!
Tabby

[Abraham George]

i am waiting for that.

[Donna]

That is so sweet that you are so close with your sister. That's rare these days. I'm sure you are a wonderful brother. Very nicely written.

[Abraham George]

thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. I am glad that you like this.

[darkangle]

love the dedication to your sibilings! it shows how much you care for her. the beginig was strong and i could feel your emtions tword the middle, you finished stong. :3

[Abraham George]

i really wish she was my real sister. Unfortunately she is my my lovely sister i found here. She is the only reason i am coming here daily.

[MsJewel]

There is nothing like the love of family. A beautiful dedication to your sister. :) Julie

[Abraham George]

Thanks Julie. i really love my sister and i never met her in real.

[Stephanie M]

That's a nicely written tribute to your sister. I'm an only child. I always wondered what it would be like to have a brother, or sister. Good job!

[Abraham George]

i never had a sister and from here i got one and i wont loose her ever for anything.

[Davidgeo]

Not everyone has a good family.

Regardless of how it ends, more poems like this would be nice.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for your comments and i glad that you liked.

[Taino]

Such a loving dedication to your sister. Your love and admiration for her so eloquently described. Very moving poem. Please keep writing.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for stopping by and dropping comments. i am happy.

[Sonakshi Arora]

A wonderful poem! I loved the tribute to your sister! Sibling relationships are very precious and sacred :)




To give you as a sister in my all lives

Don't you think it should've been have instead of give?

A wonderful and emotional write altogether. Keep it up!

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the genuine comments. I'm also a little confused on that line. I'm checking a better alternative there. Will edit soon.

[AliceBarnes]

This was such a sweet poem to read! I loved it! I personally do not have a sister, but for a moment it almost felt like I did while reading this poem. Your sister is very lucky to have such a loving sibling - my brother would never do anything like this for me. This was a lovely read!

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the genuine comments.

[Barbara Walker]

It's touching to read tributes to others and sisters and brothers can share a great bond. The love you have for your sister is very evident in this piece.

[Abraham George]

Thank you My friend.

[Cecelia A. Green]

I have a sister too so I can relate to this very well. Nicely written!!!