Dear Sister

Dedicated to my Dear Sister

You are an angel in disguise.

You are intelligent and wise.

Having a sister like you is a gift

Sometimes between us there’s a split.

 

I treasure the moments that we’d laugh together

I try to shoot jokes to make you feel better

Whether it’s a silly joke or corny

You laugh at them to make me happy

 

I share my secrets, coz’ you understand me

You shared yours, coz’ you trust me.

You are always there for me

Good times and bad time.

If I’m not there- please forgive me-

With you when you need me.

 

Whether it’s s silly joke or about that person in the corner

You’re open to me, which I honor.

That smiles and frowns on your picture I treasure

Stays there on your face forever I make sure.

I regret for the moments that we fight

Coz’ I believe that you are right.

 

May be our promises will fade

But sure in my heart you will hide

may be we have fight in many way

But couldn’t have survived life without you along the way

 

If I had one wish, it would surely be

To give you as a sister in my all lives

you’ve been my sunshine in so many ways.

In this world no one is perfect.

But in my world you’re Miss Perfect

 

I am very glad to have you as a sister

You give me tons of laughter

You are the best friend I've ever had.

My gratitude for you has no end.

 

 

Author's Note

Forgive me for the mistakes- Like to get critic reviews to make this more good.- Editing help from- Tabby Mac. Thanks Tabby Mac

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

I love to red tributes to loved ones. Especially siblings because I don’t have any. The thoughts are beautiful! You started off really strong...near the middle I think is where your words are heartfelt but seems like your wrestling between rhyme and the right words to describe your sister. This is a great first draft. I’d reread it a few times. If you rework a few lines it would really keep the momentum going till the end! The one stanza ends with me almost every line. You almost have it! The message is AWESOME! And the heart is definitely there!! I look forward to your revision!
Tabby

[Abraham George]

I appreciate your comments and i wish you give some suggestions. Please help me to make it more good.

[Abraham George]

And i really love sisters because i really don't have one. I really need one and now i have one cute little sister. So i am pouring all my love that i kept these years for a sister towards her.

[Tabby Mac]

That’s lovely! I shall try and give some specifics! I’ll message them to you!
Tabby

[Abraham George]

i am waiting for that.

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I love this poem very much! Specially because it's for your sister. I have a younger one and I love her a lot, it reminds me of how we were always the besties till the time we were not very busy, we had silly fights but that was like we had the right to fight because we are sisters. Now we are quite distant. Both of us are short tempered and I'm really lot because of my own problems sometimes. But she has always been my courage. And I'm quite protective and sometimes I feel it troubles her. Whatever it is but one thing that I can never forget is, my first poem was about her, my life's first poem that I wrote was for my little sister. I couldn't be the person I am if she never came into my life.

[BlackPrince]

This is a moving, sincere and lovely tribute to your sister. It is so easy to take our loved ones for granted because of daily familiarity. That is why you deserve praise here for your gratitude towards your dear sister.

You wonderfully used your rhymes, with a natural flow and rhythm, to convey your sincere emotions for your sister.

well done!

[Ranfer]

Isn't it
To have you as my sister in all my lives
The poem was beautifully written👏👏👏

[Amanda Trerotola]

What a beautiful tribute to your sister. I think if you rework a few words and stanzas this will be extra strong. However, the emotions are definitely there!

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the comments and i will check what i can do to make it Xtra strong.

[U.Berry]

I also have a sister and she is my best friend ..This poem won my heart.. really loved this poem😊

[sonnie ibadah]

Awww, this is so sweet 💜

[¿]

This again won my heart!!!😊

[Abraham George]

thanks for your comments and i am so happy to see you like it that much.

[¿]

Indeed it did! You're heartedly welcome😊!

[¿]

Aww...I also love my both brothers...don't know If they're away...how am gonna live...
You're one is truly heart touching!
Thanks for writing n sharing this😊

[Abraham George]

your brothers are lucky to have you as a sister.

[¿]

Thank you!!

[hemapriya]

Really gud ..ma frnd...I luv brothers a lot ...but the same I don't have one...Really hrt melting

[Abraham George]

Before i don't have any sister, but now i have one sister here.I really feel sad she is not my real sister bcoz i love her now.

Thanks for reading and i'm glad you liked it

[hemapriya]

Then I'm ur sis ryt ma bro

[Abraham George]

i wrote this for my sister Najam Us Saher. She reviewed this first.

You need me as a brother?

[hemapriya]

Yup ...it's ur wish Abraham jst asked

[Phill Oz O'fee]

It is excellent that you have such family unity and support; especially with a sibling! Your poetic write highlights the enthusiasm and appreciation of just such close family relationship – good share! :-)