Bon Voyage

Dedicated to one Friend

Today morning, my star-

You’re looking more mature.

Oh my star! Bon voyage for-

Your next trip that starting today.

584 million miles around the sun.

Since you are my star I wish

To see you every morning so don’t

Stop travelling around the sun ever.

 

Like the sand through the hourglass,

So are the days of our lives.

Your age is just a number,
It’s really not all that big,
You have seen two decades,
Since you were just a kid.

You’re not a fallen angel, you’re

A star fell on this day years before.

 

A flower blossomed in late of spring.

Spreading it’s fragrance by words in strings.

Petals with emotions and feeling,

Dripping off as a drop of fire,

That can burn greenery in my heart.

I’m a greenskeeper- digging, planting

Pruning, trimming, and waiting for the

Beautiful smile of my flower

 

Let the candles that hold by the Cake

Brings the light to your life,

Light that will shine and can break through

Any glass, will bring you out of The Bowl.

Light guide us to those stones that-

Can be polished to a pure Diamond.

Let the light brings out the stones

In you ‘n’ let you live as a Diamond.

 

In this New Year I wish you all happiness.

For my beautiful dearest morning Star,

Wish you a Jumbled “Drippy Hay bath”

Author's Note

HAPPY BIRTHDAY DEAR.
late of spring in southern Hemisphere i refer to November. Nov 15 is her birthday.
Point out the mistakes and help me to make this perfect please.

Reviews

[LazerRays]

Your love must be very strong. i can feel the power of it in your poem. such ferocity and determination behind it. she is a lucky girl ;)

[Abraham George]

I am the lucky person to have her as my Little sister.
My poem Dear Sister is about her. She is so adorable.

Thanks for your words

[Chris Shaw]

Some lovely poetic lines included in this poetry. Very nice description.

Chris

[Abraham George]

Thanks for commenting. I hope you understand how much i love my sister.

[¿]

Late of spring and starting of winter in November here...the beautiful scenery of breeze mixing in the trees!!
Bon Voyage to the further amazing journey of her in the glorious life...Ameen☺

[Abraham George]

It was her B'day on the day i add this.

[¿]

I know! That's heart touching gift☺

[Abraham George]

this way only i can give her a gift. I never met her and i didn't see her. so best way is this.

[¿]

And that's what the advantage of poetry is!☺

[Abraham George]

mmm yeah. you said it

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy the journey. I liked the hopeful words and the description of the journey. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[SleeplessVolcano]

Interesting poem.....though I'm a bit puzzled by the use of language at some places....

for instance... "today morning".....seems odd, even poetically. Poets can mix words around, but then it should still "sound well".

Then, using these words, directly from a soap opera,
"Like the sand through the hourglass,
So are the days of our lives"

I'd say is a bit cheesy.....lol... If a birthday poem is going to be special, I'd like someone to write original words, not use the words of others.

And lastly....I'm also not sure about the purpose of capital letters for cake, bowl, diamond and morning star.....the latter being a bit debatable, because if one refers to Venus or Sirius, it should be capitalized, though I'd say if I compare someone to just any star which shines in the morning, then "morning star" would suffice......

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the critics.
About the soap opera i will check because some lines were corrected by my friends and it looks good. if it is like to you said ,don't take me wrong i will correct it.

[Stephanie M]

That's a nicely written birthday poem. I like the way you referred to your friend, or your love, as "My Star."
However, I'm not sure I understand the last line.

[Abraham George]

That is Happy Birthday in jumbled form

[Sami Khalil]

So many wonderful lines to quote. Happy birthday to the subject of your poem and I think you admire her.

[Abraham George]

thanks for the comments.

[Sami Khalil]

Welcome..............

[Norah]

this is how is feel about my love. thanks for the nice poem.

[Elizabeth Mars]

Wow, I really enjoyed the way your wrote these lines, and I like how you keep referred to your (I'm guessing) friend or lover as "my star". Also I loved the lights "Light guide us to those stones that- Can be polished to pure Diamond", Love love love it :)

[Abraham George]

Thanks for your comments. while i am writing this she was my friends but now she is my dearest friend.

[Giulia King]

Beautifully written!
"Like the sand through the hourglass,
So are the days of our lives." That line made me giggle, I was thinking of "days of our lives" show.

[Abraham George]

thanks for your comments