Hope

we all should have........

I love to walk in rain

While am alone in pain

Don’t let anyone see again

That I am crying in vain

 

Only girl that I fall in love

Make her mine forever how?

Always need her in my arms

To feel all her warm charms.

 

I don’t know! She flew away

I don’t know how to find a way

I know I need to be with her anyway

I will find her someway

 

Author's Note

i just wrote this now. No time to correct. point out the mistakes please. Critic reviews are welcome.

Reviews

[Tara Marie]

Love sometimes is like the ocean. Because once u find luv. It feels like it will last forever. But just like the ocean has it's tides. So also does love.

Nicely written
Thanks for sharing
Much love
Tara

[Abraham George]

please wrote that as a poem.

[Abraham George]

i am glad to know that you loved it

[Bala Gorthi]

One can feel the pain in this write. That is the beauty of this craft. The first section is close to my heart because I feel the same way. Simple yet beautiful and touching. Loved reading this.Thank you for sharing.... Bala Gorthi

[Abraham George]

thanks for visiting and commenting.

[Bala Gorthi]

You are welcome my friend.

[Priyanshi]

Rhyming is correct and so simple and beautiful lines, you penned..you will find her someday...
no correction is required, its great in itself.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for your kind words.

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Joey Nizz]

I loved this, your words choices and your rhymes at each sentence was just great!

The first part of this poem made me remember when I walked in the rain, something I loved to do.

Well penned Abraham, thank you for sharing :)

[Abraham George]

thanks my friend. your comments are inspirational.

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)

[wordman]

i can feel your pain,sometimes love hurts

[Abraham George]

but we need to enjoy that. Love always hurt.

thanks

[wordman]

not always,you're welcome

[Najam Us Saher]

Great rhyming. I really, really liked this...I can feel and understand your pain. I loved the first stanza the most.

[Abraham George]

thanks for your comments

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[Great Aunt Astri]

This is a heart felt plea to the rain. Perhaps the rain will find her someway. No corrections, but perhaps you could use 'charms' instead of 'warms? Or even 'warm charms'. The line, 'only girl I fall in love' seems a bit odd (to my ears) but I don't think you should change it. It is a lovely little poem.

[Abraham George]

thanks for the great suggestions.

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

This is a very somber and simple poem. It however should have this line at the end... as it's true and pure... Any Poem should have this line when talking about hope. "Hope is a good thing... Maybe the best of things and No good thing ever dies."

[Abraham George]

i try to maintain the rhyme

[Abraham George]

thanks for your visit and valuable comments

[Sandipta$]

U ll find her someway....... 🔜

[Abraham George]

thanks . I hope so

[Surya]

Hope..as u said we all must have....
Rhyming is good...I found no mistakes....
I enjoyed it...:)

[Abraham George]

thanks for your visit.