Morning Star

Dedicated to my dear friend i have here.

Every morning I wake up to see my Morning star.

All stars in the sky are shining, but my star is not. All ‘cause of her love.

Once she loved a man from earth and her love was endless.

The man from earth, she treated as a god from heaven.

I can see my star is crying and those tears falling like rain

burning my heart without touching my skin.

Deep inside she have flaming scoria that she hides with her fake glittering smile.

Whenever she expresses her love, Silence was the only answer she got.

Need to wait or wanna forget, she doesn’t know.

Only thing she knows is that she can’t forget him.

My tears are shedding when I listen to the song she sings,

For him to listen, but I don’t know whether he listens.

The music of pure love, pain of bereavement- I heard like this

“Even if you sleeping in those beautiful dreams of us,

Forgetfulness is the medicine you found to cure my Love,

Our celestial love will shaken your rhythm of life.

Please come to me even as your heart only,

Fly with me like a humming bird

Fondle me with your feathers; we can live in the nest that

 I built in heaven using our loveable memories."

Her prayer will be answered even by the God Ebisu.

But why didn’t he? I will join in her prayer and let their celestial love wins,

‘Cause she is my morning star and my morning should be

filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart.

Author's Note

show me my mistakes, let me correct it and make it perfect.

This is for a friend i have here and if that friend understand that it is for him/her, then i am happy.

Reviews

[Firemay]

i really like the fact that you went across the universe with this poem.
can i just correct you on something?
you cannot write "But why didn't?", it can be "But why didn't he?" as in why didn't he answer her prayer.
And also, the last sentence kind of doesn't ring right. you could maybe change it to " Cause she is my morning star and my morning should be
filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart."

[Abraham George]

thanks for the corrections.

[Abraham George]

corrected.

[Hope]

Your friend is lucky to have a companion like you Abraham!
The poem you wrote is one of my favs.
The entire structure is great!
Good work!!

[Abraham George]

thanks for your good words

[Zoya]

Aww, this so sweet. Najam would be very lucky to have such a supportive friend. Well done!

[Najam Us Saher]

Indeed Zoe, I am really happy to have each and every friend like you all. ☺

[Zoya]

Same here :)

[Abraham George]

Thanks Zoe. I am glad you like this.

[Zoya]

No worries

[jazzymars]

Output is really best when you are inspired of something or someone. That someone is very lucky on what you have wrote for her/him.

[Abraham George]

thanks. She is very happy after read this, so i am also happy

[jazzymars]

i guess I already know who is she

[Abraham George]

Najam us Saher

[jazzymars]

It's Najam? Hello Najam!.. ;)

[jazzymars]

yup I saw comment below. haha

[Abraham George]

mmm. her name means Morning star

[jazzymars]

oh I see..

[Abraham George]

You didn't know that meaning?

[jazzymars]

I didn't know actually

[Najam Us Saher]

Hi jazzymars... 😀

[jazzymars]

:D Hello morning star. ;)

[Najam Us Saher]

Hahahaaaha....
Hi, once again.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

lol, najam....every one is calling you morning star now!

[Najam Us Saher]

Yeah Wajiha. 😁

[Wajiha Nayeem]

hahah thts pretty gud.

[Abraham George]

hey it's my Morning Star.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

hahaha okay mr.abraham george.

[jazzymars]

HELLO GUYS

[Abraham George]

yes my friend

[Joey Nizz]

This is truly such an amazing read!
You words hold emotions that were so real that I actually felt them, I hope your friend would read your fantastic words and see what a wonderful man and friend you are :)

Thank you for sharing your work.

[Abraham George]

thanks bro.

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)

[hemapriya]

I like the way u handles the language my frnd

[Abraham George]

thanks for your comments

[hemapriya]

No mention :)

[AYVID N]

Written with much care and love. There are no mistakes really when the words stem from the truest of emotions. I hope your friend understands and appreciates the lovely tribute.

[Abraham George]

thanks for you support and kind words

[An owl on the moon]

This is a truly wondrous dedication to your dear friend. It seems so vast, across space, across the divine passages, into shadowlands and shining smiles. This is life for the ages to reflect upon always.

[Abraham George]

you are so kind. thanks for your comments

[Anjali]

It's beautiful! I absolutely loved it. I can tell that this poem is straight from the heart one. I really really liked it! Just keep writing these kind of phenomenal writes!

[Abraham George]

Its about one friend i have here. one true friend.
that's why it's from heart i wrote

thanks for your comments

[Anjali]

It's beautiful! You are very welcome!

[Abraham George]

i think you understand who is my Morning Star!

[Anjali]

Oh I sure do! And I know that it's the truth you wrote above. She totally deserves it by the way.

[Abraham George]

yeah she deserve it

[Farhan Shaikh]

Creative poem, and the whole poem is lovely, very good job, you're her true friend..

[Abraham George]

thanks farhan