Morning Star

Dedicated to my dear friend i have here.

Every morning I wake up to see my Morning star.

All stars in the sky are shining, but my star is not. All ‘cause of her love.

Once she loved a man from earth and her love was endless.

The man from earth, she treated as a god from heaven.

I can see my star is crying and those tears falling like rain

burning my heart without touching my skin.

Deep inside she have flaming scoria that she hides with her fake glittering smile.

Whenever she expresses her love, Silence was the only answer she got.

Need to wait or wanna forget, she doesn’t know.

Only thing she knows is that she can’t forget him.

My tears are shedding when I listen to the song she sings,

For him to listen, but I don’t know whether he listens.

The music of pure love, pain of bereavement- I heard like this

“Even if you sleeping in those beautiful dreams of us,

Forgetfulness is the medicine you found to cure my Love,

Our celestial love will shaken your rhythm of life.

Please come to me even as your heart only,

Fly with me like a humming bird

Fondle me with your feathers; we can live in the nest that

 I built in heaven using our loveable memories."

Her prayer will be answered even by the God Ebisu.

But why didn’t he? I will join in her prayer and let their celestial love wins,

‘Cause she is my morning star and my morning should be

filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart.

Author's Note

show me my mistakes, let me correct it and make it perfect.

This is for a friend i have here and if that friend understand that it is for him/her, then i am happy.

Reviews

[Firemay]

i really like the fact that you went across the universe with this poem.
can i just correct you on something?
you cannot write "But why didn't?", it can be "But why didn't he?" as in why didn't he answer her prayer.
And also, the last sentence kind of doesn't ring right. you could maybe change it to " Cause she is my morning star and my morning should be
filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart."

[Abraham George]

thanks for the corrections.

[Abraham George]

corrected.

[LazerRays]

what a beautiful poem you have written. this painted a picture in my mind that i would love to remember forever :)

[Abraham George]

This is also about her my little sister. Actually i met her here and then become friends. And later i realized i have a bundle of love for her as a sister. Because i don't have one. I adopted her as my sister. My beloved.
Thanks for the comments

Abram Geo.

[Chris Shaw]

A beautiful dedication to your friend. What a difference that smile and his/her presence can make to your day. Nicely expressed lines.

Chris

[Abraham George]

Najam Us Saher means Morning star

[¿]

You know this one makes me drowned in emotions...that to mixed...like happy sad!
Happy to see a pure friendship bond....sad for the one who broke heart...
It gives me the vibes of the song Thousand Years....
It's wonderful ode....thanks for sharing☺!

[Abraham George]

thousand years of Christina Perri?

[Abraham George]

I think you know what her name means and why i put this name for my poem.

[¿]

Yeah!
Pratkaal (dawn) ki tara....Morning Star...Najam us

[Abraham George]

Yes i literally meant her only.

[¿]

Haan boss..menu pta ae!😇

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful, kind and beautiful words shared. You made the reader see and believe your words ands your thoughts. Thank you Abraham for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Giulia King]

There's something absolutely magical about stars. It's my favorite thing to write about :) This poem is my favorite right now. The last two lines are so beautiful. Well done, dear poet :)

[Abraham George]

Its about my friend. thanks for your sweet comment

[Sami Khalil]

Very sweet and filled with true friendship sentiments. You express it all in a wonderful and endearing way...:)............

[Abraham George]

thanks for finding time to read my writings and valuable comments

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...:::))))

[Great Aunt Astri]

I loved this poem .. the stars in the Universe and lost love. A wonderful prayer for his morning star, which should indeed 'be filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart'. I hope his vigilance brings that about. I had to look up 'scoria'. What a wonderful word to describe that feeling that must be going on behind her 'fake glittering smile'. I wouldn't worry too much about mistakes, English is so different in different parts of the world. I could not actually see any mistakes, except that the tenses perhaps, get a bit jumbled? Lovely write.

[Abraham George]

i am really honored . i really mean it. Love to read your review. inspirational.

[Norah]

I like how simple what you wrote is, yet it greatly grabbed my attention!
Well done xx

[Abraham George]

thanks. i am glad

[Jiya]

beautifully phrased! just loved it!

[Abraham George]

thanks and i wrote it about a friend i have here.

[Write Cat]

There was once a saying i read somewhere; When I look up to the stars it feels as if all my worries shrink down to size. This poem has a very in depth meaning!!

[Abraham George]

thanks for the comments.