Beautiful Eyes

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, without me knowing

Those of my beloved one’s

Who need to make me his

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, in all my problems

Those of my Dad’s

Who have care for me

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, when I am alone

Those of my Mom’s

Who need to make me happy

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, when I am happy

Those of my friends’

Who need to enjoy with me

Two beautiful eyes of mine

Never saw what’s happening around,

Ever cared tears in those

Beautiful  eyes till

The days of life counted on

Reviews

[Anjali]

Nice!!!! I loved it very much, two beautiful eyes, indeed, yours and your loved ones, amazing! A beautiful poem on beautiful eyes!.😉😉

[Abraham George]

Thanks for commenting . I am glad to know that you like it.

[Anjali]

Very much actually! You are very welcome!

[Sofia]

Beautiful write...I liked it..keep on writing :)

[Abraham George]

thanks for valuable comments

[Sofia]

Welcome :)

[rowan.taylorrr]

this was really good but a bit confusing and hard to process

[Abraham George]

thanks for the comments

[heartspeaks]

It was a good write but few lines felt a bit odd as in could be written in another way.
"Who need to make me his" instead could have been "Who wants me to be as his " cause we are speaking about eyes of a lover right.

"Those of my Mom’s
Who need to make me happy"
instead could be
" Who need to see me happy or Who make my soul happy . "
and in the last para i think it was " Carried " in third line .
Please don't get me wrong. I just shared my view. No offence on your work.
And as per the feelings are considered they are bursting out through the whole poem.
I loved the last para the most.
Overall it was a good read.

[Abraham George]

i need this type of comments. Critics , because then i can make my work perfect. Thanks for your support.

[heartspeaks]

😊 good sportsman spirit. your welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry. Gentle, kind and wonderful words for love and kindness. Those eyes. Can make us beg for forgiveness before we have sins. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Abraham George]

thanks Coyote for your comments and the time you spend on my wrting

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Krutika]

I believe in the saying that eyes are doors to heart. I loved the last stanza as it wrapped up nicely what you wanted to say. Referring people with their eyes..thats what I liked the most!
Happy Writing :)

[Abraham George]

Thanks for your comments and i appreciate .

[darkangle]

Love the poem shows such love. i dont think anyting needs tweking. my fave lines are:
Two beautiful eyes follow
Me, when I am alone
Those of my Mom’s
Who need to make me happy

[Abraham George]

Thanks Dark Angel. i didn't think this one is good enough to add here .i planned to remove this poem within few days if no one give a comment

[Abraham George]

Thanks for the support

[CAPOLAVORO]

How about my eyes? haha. Nice one Abraham. Keep writing.

[Abraham George]

add your face picture i will write a poem about your eyes

[Grace]

yes,but sometimes family don't care at all.

[Joey Nizz]

What a beautiful piece, Thanks for sharing.
Only the eyes of the ones that love you could make you feel good about yourself.

[Abraham George]

thanks but we never saw what in others eyes

[Joey Nizz]

Sometimes you may not see behind their eyes, but you can see what they see from the way they are around you.