Phoenix

A love story

Raise me from the flaming ashes

Give me colorful feathers to fly

To the skies, over the clouds

Looking for a place to rest

Winds brings the fragrance

Of blossom flowers, is thou

Flowing ocean seems to be calm

 Becomes wild, when I saw thou

Without dripping a single drop

While the water- my life- flowing

Thou become a sea that could

Absorb anything into deep

Nightingale singing mumble

Fading flowing rivers’ lullaby

Drops of waters dripping off

Petals of my lovely flower

Even heaven calls me away

From you, never run away

Love to dissolve in your beauty

That’s the heaven I seek forever

Reviews

[Ana B.]

This is very romantic...very beautiful and full of longing :)

[Abraham George]

thanks you very much for your kind words.

[Raven Moonchild]

Absolutely beautiful and mesmerizing poem, mate. :D Your imagination is amazing!!!

[Abraham George]

thanks for your visit and lovely comments.

[Kesha]

I very much liked this piece and the imagery it provoked

[Abraham George]

i am honored by your comments.

[Diane]

I enjoyed this poem. It flowed very well. I like how you use your wording and you step out of the box to mix it up a little. I will check out the rest of your writing when I. Great Job!

[Abraham George]

thanks for your visit and kind comments.

[Mr.Write]

This started off about the phoenix and beautiful words that expressed themes like "redemption" and "freedom." Then, however it transformed(at least that's how it seems to me) to be about a volatile life, and a strange love. I also question the choice to use another bird species in the poem.

As far as I know I don't think there's any rule that you should express a poem's subject matter using only a main theme so it's still a fairly wonderful poem nonetheless.

[Abraham George]

the entire meaning is different. if you like to know that, give me a message i will explain what i wrote.

[Hope]

this is really a lovely poem.
Loved the way you described it.
Good poem indeed!

[Abraham George]

thanks for your visit

[wordman]

a beautiful poem of love,enjoyed it

[Abraham George]

thanks for your comments

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

This is about a bird and speaks of beauty. Excellent. Beauty is very warming.

[Abraham George]

its real meaning is something different.

[Carol Cashes]

I liked that you combined the fire necessary for the phoenix and the water to sustain it's life. That's very clever and this is well written.

[Abraham George]

Indirect meaning is hidden in between the words.

thanks for the comments

[Anjali]

Wow..... Beautiful! I liked it. 😊

[Abraham George]

thanks for your words.