Promise

How anxious you were;
To cling love, old.
Now I feel you beat silently;
Like a stone, dead cold.
IT was a play perhaps,
Fate so perfectly played.
So to me Peace over love
Seemed a fair trade.
Feelings were restrained;
Emotions were slayed.
And to keep these things as such
A promise was made.

But I still sense it clearly;
Behind the rocks, a wave.
To feel that love once more,
You still crave.
Oh heart! My heart!
You're so naive.
Don't you remember?
The anxiety and that pain
Or do you think that
I made that promise in vain.
Even if you think so
Your pleadings won't be heard.
Because i won't listen to you
As I am a man of my word.

Reviews

[goldie uttamchandani]

a poem that flows wonderfully, great rhymes and the message of conviction "as i am a man of my word" - my favourite.

[prajakta]

a well written piece.loved the rhyme:)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you very much Ma'am :)

[kenza salmi]

Great work ! I really like it ! keep on the good work, MAN !

[Arunima]

Padh chuki hun....Bta bhi diya hai kaisa hai....;p

[Abilash Uttama]

hmm.. thanks :P

[Arunima]

tareef toh ki nahi thi re maine jahan tak mujhe yaad hai..

[mariliis]

Feelings never do make sense. A fine piece you've got there. The message is clear as well. Sweet overall.

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you :)

[preet bajwara]

its awesome dear.loved it

[Abilash Uttama]

thanks :)
aur puraane account ka kya hua?

[preet bajwara]

actually maine vo id delete kr di thi isiliye writerscafe se link toot gya tha. i cant tell u mai kitni kitni khush hoo tum se baat kr k

[Pushkar Prabhat]

paradoxical promise............
awesome poem of reminiscent love and subdued heart......
i liked it!!!
:)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you :)