Part of me

You adored her I know,

I know it all.

I told you to let her go,

But you headed for the inevitable fall.

 

I know how much you suffered

And how much you liked it.

Many a times you were stabbed.

Many a time you were healed.

By the same person again and again,

Enduring pain, dripping blood in vain.

I told you to let her go,

But you headed for the inevitable fall.

 

You were misled by her charming smile.

The smile that cheered you up for a while.

Like a Moth craving for light,

You craved for her smile.

And just like moth, you eventually died.

Though I had told you to let her go

But you headed for the inevitable fall

 

I’m glad you could see it in the end,

The smile that persisted on her face,

When you were lying on your death bed.

Sometimes I look in the mirror

To see your fragile figure in it.

But do I want you to be there?

No, I don’t!

Will I mourn for you?

No, I won’t!

Reviews

[Peach]

Your use of words to depict such regretful and stupid love is extraordinary. Keep that up!

[Abilash Uttama]

Thanks for stopping by ;)

[Abilash Uttama]

Thanks for stopping by ;)

[Peach]

I noticed that my GREAT WORK meter was empty. Fortunately for me, I found a good source of GREAT WORK. The source was your brilliant writing...
hahahaha...

[ANTO]

Such powerful and verging on callous self-reproach. Perhaps a conversation betwen the head and (broken heart) - the head saying 'told you so' to the heart. The heart never listens, does it?
Will I mourn you - No I won't

Will I miss you...?

[Abilash Uttama]

Will I miss you.? - Occasionally
Thanks for your time Sir :)

[ANTO]

My pleasure Abilash :))

[Arunima]

You really are amazing...i am already ur fan...this piece is exemplary!!!

[Abilash Uttama]

Thank you:)

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

It's so romantic. I like your poetry. You give us a great feelings to read more and more your poem. Good done. Thanks for sharing.

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you sir

[Ayank Chourasia]

that part of me left yesterday what's left of me is strong today...this line concludes it all amazing work bro
final lines were damn powerful all face this situtation where we love someone who we should have never loved so much..

[Ayank Chourasia]

SIster am a guy bro that right there is my sister :(

[Abilash Uttama]

Oh i'm extremely sorry bro

[~]

ohhhh.. so sad and so powerful, especially those last lines:
But do I want you to be there?
No, I don’t!
Will I mourn for you?
No, I won’t! --- they conclude the strength that the speaker had to muster while seeing all this happen.
well done! :D

[Abilash Uttama]

Thank you so much!

[Gurleen Saluja]

A good write, creating well an imagery of betrayal. Thanks for sharing :)

[Abilash Uttama]

thanks for your time Gurleen, will love to see your work but only after exams :P

[Gurleen Saluja]

Haha sure.. Take your time :)

[kategarcia577]

nice piece full of emotion continue writing ....

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you very much kate and i will continue :)

[Prashant Pandey]

mind and heart both play d game. They don't listen and in d end leave u with d unwanted result and you have to face that. Full of emotions. One of my favorite from now.

[Abilash Uttama]

thanks brother :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
such intense and powerful emotions.......
it is sad how people betray us.....and how our own mind betray us even more so.......
passionately written.......
i liked it!!!
:)

[Abilash Uttama]

I'm glad that you liked it :)