Dilemma

I can’t remember when its seed was sown
Sometimes I think this tree grew by its own
Once, its fruits were the reason of my glee
But now I think they are not enough for me
Maybe my needs and desires have grown
Or maybe its productivity has depleted
For resurrection of hope and exuberance
I will grow a new fruitful tree in its place
But then I think,'' what if this seed fails?''

Reviews

[Arunima]

Are u in any case a"nature lover"? this tells me how well you are with words....reminds me of a story,"THE CHERRY TREE"...

[Abilash Uttama]

Nature inspires me a lot and I believe you can experess anything with nature's example

[Arunima]

SO TRUE.I must confess i need some grooming on the nature subject....

[nazia]

I liked the metaphor of seeds you used here. You seem to like metaphors. Direct straight to the point no circumlocution more like a journal article. Nice write. I like your thought process here :)

[Abilash Uttama]

Yeah i do :D, thank you very much :)

[Isabel25]

Then you plant another one and yet another one, if that also fails. Just imagine how life would be if all the seeds grew and gave fruit- you'll end up stuck in a forest and you'll be sick of eating fruit... Uncertainties and disappointments take us farther than victories. They also make our achievements seem more precious.
Beautifully written.

Suggestion: add a comma after 'once' in the third line and one after 'think' in the last line. Adds more effect to it... and where are the quotes for "What if this seed fails?"..I'm sorry,I am a bit obsessed with punctuation and grammar. :)

[Abilash Uttama]

Grammar nazi, i knew it. thank you so much for your time and suggestion :)

[Isabel25]

Anytime...and I am proud to be one. It's been five years since I am learning literature- you can't blame me.

[Abilash Uttama]

Indeed, you should be proud:) now i'm thinking of calling you literature gal. i hope you are not much older than me :P

[Isabel25]

I will be 23 this August. So I am older. And I don't mind that name at all :P

[Abilash Uttama]

I'll go with Ma'am then :P

[Isabel25]

Oh dear God, please NO!!!

[Abilash Uttama]

Now we are even :D

[Death's Poet]

Beautiful! I truely look forward to reading more of your work

[Abilash Uttama]

thanks Ma'am

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

fantastic as usual . you are great.

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you very much Harpreet :)

[rashu]

direct to the point short but still effective ..
nice write keep it up

[Abilash Uttama]

thanks for the review :)

[ASHIDASH]

This is great and up to the point.

[Abilash Uttama]

thanks for the review :)

[littlemercies]

I loved this!! Short but direct. Enjoyed the metaphor between this tree and this thing that you cherish . All good things come to an end. Forever changing like seasons, it grows, you love. It fails, you weep. Hope is sparked when you consider another option. But there's always that doubt. Will this end the same? Human nature; self preservation.
Bravo my dear,
-T

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you very much for reviewing my poem. :)