Who Would Love You?

The shadow loomed over her
Full of hate and pain
Whispering urgently into her ear
"Who would love you?
Who would love you?"
Showing her pictures of all the people
Who were more beautiful than her,
Who were thinner than her
Who were more loved than her

The shadow loomed over her
Full of spite and malice
Chattering angrily into her ear
"Who would love you?
Who would love you?"
Telling her stories of all the people
Who were more popular than her
Who were more admired than her
Who were more loved than her

The shadow loomed over her
Full of scorn and contempt
Shouting rapidly into her ear
"Who would love you?
Who would love you?"
Making her watch all the people
Who were better than her
Who were preferred over her
Who were loved more than her

The shadow loomed over her
Full of pleasure and glee
Taunting into her unhearing ear
"I am your terror
Your dread, your fear.
For I am your depression
And none can conquer me"

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

This is quite true, actually very true...
Because you've included a lot of wisdom in here.. about fear..terror and all.. I liked the concept behind this. Often I feel the same as the girl. Thanks for letting me know that it's the fear in me...
Honestly, I ask the same question often to myself but I don't get the answers. I see each of my friend happy in relations when I stand alone in my own way, my own thoughts...
Very nice poem, seems I chose to read the best of yours... : )
Anindita : )

[Abibliophobe]

Thank you very much! And you can get through this! :)

[Anindita Janhabee]

most welcome... and hope so..

[Anindita Janhabee]

Congratulations on placing in the contest!!!

[LovePoetry0004]

Such an eery feel to it, really great! The repitition to it is in the best spots possible. Just great, really enjoyed this.

[Surabhi Kaushik]

Repetition works well to keep this poem together. Lots of pain, sorrow and self doubt expressed here. I liked it.

[Abibliophobe]

Thank you!

[Addict With a Pen]

Very dark poem. It makes me sad to read it, but you did a great job writing it. Your repetition of words really made the meaning of this poem so deep and sorrow.
Great writing

[Abibliophobe]

Thank you!