The world needs the people, to sow and to reap The world needs the surface, the world needs the deep The world needs protection, and caring, and love The world needs the olive branch, the world needs the dove The world needs itself to carry its chores, The world needs the fields and the world needs the moors The world needs the sunlight-its rays are alive And under its rule it will wallow and thrive The world needs its joy, and the world needs its grief The world needs the tree, and the world needs its leaf
The world is a mirror, the world is a fawn The world is an oyster, the world is the dawn The world’s never ending, and end never will, And ten decades on, it will be stronger still.
very beautiful! Contrary to what some have said, I think the repitition makes the piece - helps the flow of it and creates more of an impact.
well done
This poem has a great deep meaning. It brings out all the world is and can be for different people. I believe this world is a crazy insane place but it can be so much fun. The flow of this poem is easy to read and I like that. You have done a wonderful job on this poem. You may have strayed from your usual genre but you did a great job on writing on a new topic. I think this suits you well.
I agree, it would be better if you hadn't repeated "the world" for all but 2 lines (and twice in 1 line). Maybe it would be better written as:
The world needs the people, to sow and to reap
It needs the land on the surface and the water down deep.
We need to protect it, with care and love.
We need to give it the olive branch and the cry of the dove.
And just stuff like that. Avoid repetition as much as possible! Other than that it was written very well for just a random write. Well done.
I agree with everyone else that there's a lot of repetition in this one, but I actually kind of like it! :) But whether the repetition is a good or a bad thing, this poem is great and I think you should do some more random writes if they all end up like this one :)
Can't get worst we hope not. I like the poem. Full of hope and desire of a better world. I like the story and the flow of this poem. A excellent poem.
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