Forever Lost

About Peace and Chaos

 Crystal skies fill me with peace,
 an overwhelming Reminder of Love,
 Compassion, and Soul.
 Yet still chaos tempts to guide me further,
 Tries to end my life.
 At times i feel that all of my soul is peaceful,
 and still half tempts me to destroy myself,
 with remembrance of my past.
 Sometimes i feel,
 Forever Lost.

Reviews

[NightsShade]

I have to agree with Brittany, it would seem a lot more poetic if you formatted this into stanzas. I also have to say that the big font was kind of distracting and I focused more on that than the quality of your writing, presentation is part of the writing process too (but of course not as important). But over all this is a great poem and when I get time i'll be reading more of your writing.

[Uneek]

Totally relatable!! Nice peice.

[ayosonolowo]

Nice poem,
please keep it up,
great work.

[Abel Garcia]

thanks brittany i will try harder with stanzas Next time :D

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[Brittany DeFranco]

I love the poem, but couldn't you put it into stanzas like
Crystal skies fill me with peace,
an overwhelming Reminder of Love,
Compassion, and Soul
Something like that. Otherwise, I love it, I hope you keep writing ^-^