I Love You Deep.

I Love You Deep.

      I have fallen in love with people before you,

 I was ready to sacrifice my heart and soul for them,

 but they betrayed me, 

they left me to rot in my own grieve,

 I promised to never fall again, 

never fall in love,

 never fall for those lies; 

until you came.

 Until you existed in my life and broke down the walls I have built,

 every freaking wall I've built to become stronger, 

every armor I've made to shield myself from the arrows of love, you made them crumble into pieces,

 you made them dissolve into nothing.

 At first I hated you for it, 

I hated you for destroying what I have been building for months and years;

 but something different happened, 

with every wall that crumbled,

 a piece of pain dissolved with it,

 a piece of pain faded,

 that's when I addicted you;

 without you pain would control my wilted heart, 

weakness would control my fragile brain, 

all I could think of before I go to bed was what would happen if I lost you, 

will I get over you? 

will I move on?

 will I stop craving you?

 but I got too tired, 

too tired of over thinking and too tired of worrying. Darling, I'm addicted to you. Darling, I love you deep."

Author's Note

Please leave me your feedback and reviews I would love to know your opinion!

Reviews

[Skylah Ginette]

Ooo I really like that last line! The volta of this poem is like a trick, a change that at first seems positive and then makes you question the vailidity of the feeling. Well structured, emotional and thought provoking. It feels like it could maybe be given another edit though. "they left me to rot in my own grieve" seems like a clever play on words, but "that's when I addicted you, you were a drug" seems less intentional and in turn takes away from the power you command in your writing. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this!

[Abeer Tarek]

thank you so much! English is my second language that's why you may see a few mistakes but yeah I try my best haha thanks!

[Skylah Ginette]

Fair enough then haha super well done!! Keep cultivating your talent

[Abeer Tarek]

Thanks again ma'am! your words mean a lot!

[richy]

They left me to rot in my own grieve is a very clever line. You need to work on your past and present tense. That's all. Good thoughts here.

[Abeer Tarek]

Thank you very much..and yes English being my second language makes it tough sometimes haha but yeah I'm working on it

[richy]

I I understand completely. Your wetting doesn't even suffer from it

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Wow its such a heart melting piece of work! love the way you have expressed the emotions in last few lines "I'm addicted to you. Darling, I love you deep." Beautiful & please keep writing....

[Inject Positivity]

I can relate to it my frnd....I am a fan of your writings from now on my frnd....You got talent in writing....Make Egypt proud....God bless you...

[Abeer Tarek]

Thank you so much sir, your words make me happy. Thanks :)

[Inject Positivity]

Don't call me sir my frnd, we are in a family here, you can call me Dhiman....

[Travis Prino]

I love this. Really brings back that feeling of losing love and questioning everything even when you've found love again. Good job. Great read.

[Abeer Tarek]

Thank you so much! This means a lot

[wafaa]

nice work (y) , i love how you describe your feelings , it's real and natural , and love still love xD

[Abeer Tarek]

Haha yup love xD I have am entire book that's not about love though hahaa but yea thank you so much!

[Alias]

i love the last line, it's lyrical
have you ever written songs?

[Abeer Tarek]

No actually I have not but I haven't tried either! maybe I should take a shot! thank you :D

[Alias]

definitely try, there's no harm in giving it a go :) I think you could create something really meaningful

[Abeer Tarek]

Your words mean a lot! thank you :D

[zunie frost]

this poetry is so powerful ..!!!! deep emotions and thought !!!! i love it thanks for sharing this beautiful poetry !!!! 100 points from me

[Abeer Tarek]

Wow thank you so much! Your words encourage me to do better thanks to you!

[zunie frost]

it's my pleasure !!! that's what we are here for to do better and learn more !!!

[Abeer Tarek]

Yup totally! I'll make sure to check out your work to!

[zunie frost]

yup please !!!!! you are welcome any time !!!

[Bohrium Guy]

I really enjoyed the feel and vision of this poem. Your imagery is beautiful and complex. I really enjoyed the power contained.

Thanks for sharing...

~Rob~

[Abeer Tarek]

Thank you for your support Rob! Your words mean so much to me! Thanks again

[Bohrium Guy]

Your very welcome!