My Perfect Stranger

 

I am the west, my love she is the east.

I tried to draw near.

No matter what I try I can’t close the gap.

My east, why will you not love me?

Am I not good enough?

Would I not die for you?

Will you not love me?

No, that is always the answer.

I change. I cannot help it.

I am just trying to ease my pain.

I push away trying to put between us distance.

But in vain are all my efforts.

For you are my opposite, my great love.

My perfect stranger.

Reviews

Dear Phantom Heart

First, you are a very talented title writer. Pouring Blue is a wonderful title. In songwriting, this is called a DNA title because it is not immediately obvious what it is, what it's about like, say, a title like The Black Cat.
My Perfect Stranger is another DNA title. If you think of a song list for a CD, the DNA titles will always jump out.

In this poem, I would start right away supporting the theme of opposites attract. It's a very good one. Then try different line breaks for greater emphasis per the examples in my review of Pouring Blue.

Best
Hattie

[QuietPoet]

I loved this. I cant wait till you put more stuff up.

[DanaRegen]

This is a great poem, its like you want to get close and get to know someone, but theres somthing in the way blocking you, a wall. They are like the perfect stranger to you, fanatabulous poem.

[Tim Allison]

A poem heavy laden with great emotional turmoil. Your pain is almost palpable. Asking questions that have been asked for thousands of years... feeling pain that has been well forged by millions of reflective souls for millions of years... It's unfortunate that love can sometimes be such a painful experience, but when it works, you've truly made something beautiful, something special, that transcends everything else and takes you as close to heaven as one can get while still here on Earth. Take care, and thanks for sharing. =o)