Just a Few Drops of Rain

Some have blamed it on those eccentricities,

On the recurrences of a whim,

But failed to look deep inside

Where the crevices have long waited,

Waited to be filled.

And what would they not do,

Do for a few drops of rain,

A few drops of rain on the land barren,

For it has long been haunted by the chastity,

And the arid, pious hollowness calls for

To be tainted at this hour.

 

And thy vision’s tunnels have been infested

By the cravers of corporeality,

And thy mind have played the soul catcher

Amidst the phlegmatic plebeian

For the much denied amorous wants,

And thy have waded in alien waters

Garnering quietude for that inner disquiet,

And thy words of worship defy those celestial confines

All for a few drops of rain,

Just a few drops of rain…

On the land so barren.

 

They have ogled through those narrow slits

Woven stories out of nothingness

For they are the connoisseur of hush-hush blather.

But what are you going to do?

Draw lines around you?

Social banishment: Is that what you fear?

I hope not, for let thou be lest assured

I would give anything for thy place

To have that choice, and be able to choose

 No matter if it vitiates the morals,

Or desecrates the rules,

For I would blissfully get spoiled

For a few drops of rain,

Yes, just a few drops of rain,

On the land so barren.

Author's Note

This was written for one of my aunts. She often befriends people from all walks of life (literally)... people often criticize her for her whimsical, moody self... but it had made me think... she is kind of lonely... and may be the want of warmth and affection has prompted her to do this.... stories of our lives can be way too different... but do we take time enough to understand before we analyze someone's behavior ? I don't think so...

Reviews

[Hayley]

Very moving repetitiveness: "For I would blissfully get spoiled
For a few drops of rain,
Yes, just a few drops of rain,
On the land so barren."
Your vocabulary is extremely exceptional and effective, as well as your use of literary devices. I was especially struck by your use of alliteration.
I really enjoyed this read. You have great potential for growth as a writer; Keep writing! I look forward to more.

[An owl on the moon]

A moving dedication that weaves metaphors like rich magic... how her life and choices define her... reveal her... and how our days drive us too often into self... not towards those who wander by us.. Yes, longing for those drops of rain to revive and refresh.

[Arielle Ann]

I understand your opinion...we analyze others more than we analyze ourselves..this is what irritates me most...and mostly I get infuriated when brainless gits go blabbing and showering all sorts of nonsensical advices..haha...got carried away...well its inspiring how you got inspired by your aunt and composed such beautiful lines..I loved the metaphor you used here and its repetition....great lines!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and beautiful poem. You open the door to fact and real story with a delicate pen. "es, just a few drops of rain," We need to open our eyes to the truth. All of us. We are just men and woman who want a safe place to live, work and food. Thank you for the amazing poem.
Coyote

[Ruth]

Wow!
You never fail to impress me love :)
A wonderful piece of writing, you are extremely talented!
Always a pleasure to read you!
xoxo

[Amila Jay]

How true, Great poem:-)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I can say after reading this, I've never been quick to judge anyone, I always give a number of chances for people to impress me and help me decide if they are really worth having some part of my life. Thats probably a good reason why I tend to get hurt from time to time, but eventually it all gets past me. Very clever intriguing piece. Nicely done.

~Anna Rose

[joshua deathdealer]

Again I'm loving this write. In reference to your author's note.. I see people make up their minds about someone all the time. Not even thinking that there is probably so much more to the person in question. xx

[BlueDreams]

An awesome write .. wrapped by feeling in deep.. :-)

[Mary C]

Nice feelings, nicely expressed.