Defeat

It's in the eyes of the children,

as they leave for the very first time.

It's in the heart of the solider 

as he takes a bullet on the front line.

It's in the face of a mother

as she takes the force of a blow.

It's in the hands of a father 

as he works his fingers to the bone.

It's in the soul of a city

what it does after it crumbles and burns.

And it's in the blood of a hero 

to know where he goes he may never return.

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

You have a winner here as far as I am concerned. It flows extremely well, one line to the next. The content is spot on and the last two lines of the poem sell the product!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You cover all the bases with this one...I liked how this transcends down the lines...one after another in sequence...the reader can grasp each thought and process the next one...befits the title and the theme of this work...

[KelWriter]

Beautifully written! Sounds like a transcendent moment in time. A line has been crossed and nothing will be the same again

[Pushkar Prabhat]

great!!!
very well written.......
i liked it!!!
thank you for sharing......
:)
p.s. 1st line 5th word, it should be 'of' instead of 'if'.

[A Bitter FooL]

thanks, sorry typo

[Pushkar Prabhat]

its okay.....that happens......you are welcome!!! :) :)