White Blood

I had an idea for another book and just wanted to know what you guys think?

Her skin was a tan color that ran with paintings, white paintings of her past and of their present. Upon her face are many frozen tears, almost to look like scales.

Her wrists wrapped in weeds, to remind her of her duty.  Her body encased in faint white and green-blue coral.  Soft grey fabric with ragged ends placed over her body, to help the Kayso from temptation.

Her domain is life, the life in which we call water.  With this she is the strongest ruler of the planet.  But corruption has surrounded its self with her, and now her domain is dying.  What becomes of the planet Karua when there’s no life left…

Author's Note

Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[IndigoChild]

this is great keep it up i'm really curious

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! I shall try! :)

[Jag]

Hey there. Sorry I been away quite a while. Didn't mean to ignore ur requests.
This ones pretty deep and wide open. Kinda stretches my brain trying to link the parts
And see where they all fit. Hope that makes some sense lol. Keep it up my friend.

[AWickedMoon]

No need to be sorry. Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoy it. :)

[Kato Uchiha]

i damire your imagination and writing skills... keep writing !!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you and I definitely will once I finish my other book. :P

[ThomasJay]

Half the time I read something from you I wish I could just spend a day in your head. That is to say I like it lol.

[AWickedMoon]

Well I would invite you in but I'm afraid there's not much room.... O.o

Also Thank you! :)

[ThomasJay]

Ditto :)

[Enigma]

This sounds so sad and so beautiful as well. She was very beautifully described, it wasn't at all difficult to see her in my head. I can imagine a beautiful water world already...
I also cant help but think of the pollution in today's water.....

[AWickedMoon]

I'm glad you could!

[Nami Machae]

oh wow... i loved this..

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you. :)

[minnie:)]

wow this is really good, I found myself feeling like I was there with her. I love it!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! That's awesome I trying to get the reader "in" the story. Mission accomplished! :)

[Calibaster]

Really sad. But at the same time, very good!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Monster ^.^]

Even without knowing what's happening at first, I somehow found myself imagining the scenery. And for that I say it's very well made!

But I think you should do something for the very first sentence... It sounds... weird. the rest is good but I really think that need to be changed.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! I did notice that it felt outta place I originally had it at the end....but I liked my last line to much and felt like it spoiled it. o I moved it up but it still didn't look right! I have played around with it this morning let me know how it looks now? :)

[Monster ^.^]

I LOVE IT! this one is definitely better!!!