The Dark kings fey

My inspiration is the Wicked Lovely series I am in love with the dark faries!

They creep among the eventide, some stay waited, against the shelves of shadows,

Inflicting pain is their game, fear is their delight.

The hounds grow most weary in their cage,

And so they run along the streets at night

Awaiting their release, within a long fight,

And so the dark fey with their darker desires,

Come to dance, while the humans stay entranced,

To seduce the woman and man, above “gods” law they are.

To feast upon the humans flesh, is hidden in their ways,

To chase the weak along those hollow halls,

They feast upon the nightmares that live in dreams, and fill the mind with fright

Until that final call, when night grows bright, and daylight strikes,

And so there glamor must again be worn

For now the dark king is awake.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think. Picture borrowed from google.

Reviews

[Monster ^.^]

I really love the imagery and the way you showed darkness! Though I think some words should not have been used (and you should have used some). I have done some very simple changes... they sound better, but it's my opinion. I've capitalized the words I edited in case you wanted to know...

They creep among the eventide, some stay waitING IN the shelves of shadows,
Inflicting pain TO their game, fear is theIR delight.
The hounds grow weary in their cage,
WHILE they run along the streets at night.
Awaiting their release, a long fight,
And so the dark fey with their darker desires,
Come to dance, wHILE the humans stay entranced,
To seduce the woman and man, above “gods”, THEY ARE LAW.
To feast upon the humans flesh is hidden in theIR ways,
To chase the weak THROUGH long halls,
Until that final call, when night grows bright and daylight strikes,
And so theIR glamor must again be worn
For now, the dark king is awake.

Some are definitely just my opinion, but some are obvious mistakes like there instead of their. But all in all, that is good! I loved it! I wouldn't take time if it weren't! :)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! I did edit it a bit. The line above “gods” law they are. As in they arnt strait or gay stuff like that dosent matter to them. It is like "above gods law they are", I just put the " " around god as there fey so they dont really have a god unless you count the the first two fey.

[Monster ^.^]

i see... okay then :)

[scripted]

This write was vividly penned... I thought it was a good write overall. Thank you for sharing, yours truely Danielle

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou. :)

[L. Catherine]

Not familiar with the series, but if it's as good as your poem, I'm certainly interested in reading it! Job well done! :)

[AWickedMoon]

Oh it is WAY better them my poem, an amazing series by an amazing author!
http://www.melissa-marr.com/

[L. Catherine]

Thanks! :)

[sithlordjp]

not familiar with the source material, but this reads really well. Great mood you've created here... Well done! You didn't pick the easiest font to read though, I'm old, my eyes are bad! ;)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! I changed the font is it a bit better now?

[sithlordjp]

Ah yes, now I can read clearly !!! Thanks for indulging an old man!

[AWickedMoon]

Ha-ha if thats you in the picture you really dont look old. :)

[KAOlmsted]

I'm not familiar with the series. Small little thing: a few spelling mistakes, the most glaring being your use of the word "there" for "their"...otherwise, nicely done.

[AWickedMoon]

Oh thankyou! I seem to always have probables with that one. Its a great series about faries but not like tinkerbell kind, more like the slighly evil take what they want kind. Its a greaat series I couldnt put them down. Melissa Marr has some great works http://www.melissa-marr.com/ :)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure, of course. Sounds like a good series.

[AWickedMoon]

problems*, Ha!

[KAOlmsted]

xD I figured!

[Calibaster]

Wow, you could write a whole story around that poem. great job!

[AWickedMoon]

Well you could read the "wickely lovely" series. My inspiration is the Dark court from the books. :)

[Calibaster]

Wow, I think I'll look them up.

[AWickedMoon]

They are an amazing set of books. Let me know what you think! :)

[Calibaster]

Sounds good!

[Megara]

like the font:)

[Harley Rose]

Amazing I love the flow of it! Nothing wrong that I can see...

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you. :)

[Lucien Maier]

Increase the font size a bit it it very hard to read at this size.

[AWickedMoon]

I have increased the font size. :)

[Lucien Maier]

Nice much better. Nice creepy poem

[AWickedMoon]

Than kyou :)