FATE

A poem about fate.

Fate does exist,

There is a path made for both you and me,

It is a path that we must follow,

I know this may seem a lot to swallow,

But that doesn’t mean that we cannot wander,

For there are many ways to walk upon your path,

Though most will stay on the path where it is safe,

There are those who will walk onto a different fate

And to them this rule will not uphold,

For in this select few a seed will grow,

And in order to feel nourished and succeed,

He must travel on the path unseen,

On adventures that were not planned,

Across an untold land,

But that is the beauty he will see,

As he will never know,

Until he reaches his goal.

Author's Note

Not sure how I feel about the ending. Any suggestions?

Reviews

[ThomasJay]

Good poem, perfect ending!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Enigma]

The ending... one word: perfect. Dont change a thing!! Dont touch it! Wonderful poem...

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! Ha-ha I wont :)

[Steven]

Yes I have a suggestion...keep your finger off the ending! :-) It's a great poem, and it definitely is inspiring no doubt.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you :)

[Darkening Shadow]

I like the ending is great. Mysterious and thoughtful. Don't change a thing, Great Write!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you!

[Megara]

none here i think it is perfect:)
great job!

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou!

[Megara]

how did you come up with this?

[AWickedMoon]

Ha-ha! Thats always a good question, well I just thought of a subject and went with it. In this case the subject being "Fate".

[Megara]

cool!i always have so many ideas and they start out good ,but then i get another idea and start that one so i forget the other one!do you have that problem too?

[AWickedMoon]

Ooooo ya but I eventually come back. I've been trying to focus on one peice at a time though. :)

[Megara]

maybey i should try that:)

[Zachary_James]

This was well writen, and i love the ending. Fate, i dont really agree with you on this, if we don't have experiences, we don't know what fate truly is. But on thev other hand a really enjoyable read.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Frieda P]

If we wander off the path, then it is not fate. It's a path of our own choosing, I may not agree but I like how you pen'd it.

[AWickedMoon]

Not a problem I respect eveyones beliefs. I'm glad you like the way I write it I think it is one of my favorites(of my writes) :)

[Calibaster]

wow. this is really good! I love the end! I know this might seem weird, but, I like the shape of the poem. :) Good job, keep up the good work! :) ;)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Calibaster]

You're very welcome!