Darkness, darkness

Random poem just popped in to my head.

Swirls, swirls,

My head is swimming,

My thoughts polluted,

If you only knew the beast that sits inside me,

If you only knew the crime’s,

The crimes that play out in my dreams,

As I dance around the blood, fire sparking at my feet,

The darkness in my heart is barely kept at bay,

I fight it every day,

The inflictions I could do, oh if you only knew

That ache,

That ache to rip,

That ache to shred,

That ache inside my bones,

That ache inside my head,

The light inside me seems to sway,

day by day,

As I break the lights around me,

In my head they chant ,

Shatter,

Shatter them; give in, as you cannot win

and they  whisper in my ear,

The darkness never goes away...

Author's Note

Let me know what you think

Reviews

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Just how many "random poems that just pop into your head" you get?! And how can all of them be good? xD

No, I'm serious. I'm really amazed with your poetry, you write it so easily. Poems that just "pop into my head" happen rarely and usually I get stuck with poems for weeks until I finish them. You're doing a pretty good job so yea... just keep them "poping"... :)

[AWickedMoon]

I'm not sure, I just get ideas and start typing or writeing and write what ever, then I go back and look at what ever words popped out. I've tryed sitting down specifically to write but it never works its an in the moment thing I guess. I deffinatly wouldnt say all of them are great though but thank you!

[Calibaster]

Great job! this was a lot different from the poem called Darkness that I wrote, but the title suggested otherwise! Really great job, a lot better than mine! keep up the good and brilliant work!:)

[Lucien Maier]

The inflictions I could do, oh if you only new/// I think you mean knew.

It has a good flow to it. unrelenting. but it does leave the reader asking why did you lead me here.

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! To be honest with you, I'm not sure im not sure what led me to it either.

[Rob Santana]

I think this is incredible!! I love it. It describes me,kinda scares me,haha. "My thoughts polluted" Killer wordage there. Remember......the darkness never goes away.......haha well done WickedMoon..

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you!

[KAOlmsted]

I think the word is "ache"...

Other than that, not bad for a poem that just popped into your head. Your dark, disturbing, twisted little head ;-)

[AWickedMoon]

Now I new it didnt look right. and thankyou! hehe

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure ;-)

[AWickedMoon]

knew* oh dear!