Death

Tried to incorporate a few different views.

Death is a new beginning,

To float high above,

To live in the same world with new friends and family,

It is to be a different creature,

To battle with your ancestors,

It is to feel great pain, or great peace.

It is to find those you lost or lose those you love

To be lost in the abyss, or to complete your quest.

To rise with the sun every day

Death is life

Author's Note

Just quickly cam up with it let me know how I can make it better.

Reviews

[being me]

to write of death the unknown transforming it into sunshine..........you do have a great talent

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! XD

[spiritwind]

I like your thoughts and your desire to think and to explore

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[scripted]

Life doesn't begin until death starts... I absolutely agree with you on this one. Our bodies are forever a a temporary state but our souls will live on forever. I LOVE the write and thank you for sharing, yours truely Danielle

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you Danielle! :)

[scripted]

Your very welcome!

[Calibaster]

Well, that's certainly a different point of view. Great job!!! ;)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Calibaster]

you're welcome

[MOON]

Many believe death should not be feared as this life is temporary and the next a rebirth. You captured this well.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you. :)

[Harley Rose]

A different look at it... Love the flow of it... Amazing

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you.

[Dhaye]

Death is a new beginning
Death is life
I agree! Life here on earth would end, but the end will lead to the new beginning, a new life which would make us feel pain no more, no aches, no tears, no wars, no evil.....only the good things.

[AWickedMoon]

:)

[Boy of the red]

deathcan be described in so many ways yet i love how you did this. great job!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you :)

[Monster ^.^]

Death.. is a very broad matter, one that is dealt differently by different people. I'm happy you have your own views and is able to write it in a poem! :))

[AWickedMoon]

I tryed to put a few cutures in there heaven,the vikings,the native americans,the egyptians. :)

[Monster ^.^]

Hahaha! That's great... and oh, always remember your Their and there! You got them mixed up again! Plus tryed there is spelled as tried.... you would always find out if the spelling is wrong when it is underlined red :) maybe you didn't know :)

[AWickedMoon]

I do but sadly my word seems to be stupid. :(

[Monster ^.^]

Perhaps your Word is formatted in a different English. And obviously, THERE and THEIR are in correct spellings but the usage is the problem, in your case... and there's always the dictionary if you aren't sure... because it could get pretty annoying once the mistakes are repeated over and over :)) well, good luck to your next ventures! :))

[AWickedMoon]

wait where is the two words you mentioned?

[Monster ^.^]

No, I meant you always confuse these two words where in fact they have different meanings... the words "their" and "there" are in their correct spellings so word wont correct them for you, sadly.

[AWickedMoon]

Ah I thought you meant in this one. I was wondering how the words were eluding me on this short poem! ha-ha! I have been catching a few of them!

[Monster ^.^]

that's great then! :))

[KAOlmsted]

Interesting. I don't have any suggestions, because writing poetry is deeply personal, and only you know where this is supposed to go...only you know if it made it to the destination...all I can say is I read it, it made me think, and I didn't hate it *laugh* On the contrary, it was quite good. Thank you for sharing it with us.

-kimmer

[AWickedMoon]

I will addmit it is not one of my best or even a very good poems. I just had an idea and wanted to see what happened. So if you did hate it I really wouldnt mind. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Oh thank god, because I really hated it.

:-D

No I didn't, silly.