Paper Stars

Just a little poem I came up with searching Floating lantrens on google.

The people stand amongst their stars,

The world is beautiful at night,

Added beauty with their light,

But release they must there taste of stars,

And let them float unto the sky above,

And as they float,

The crowd is silent,

Such beauty is meant to be soundless,

For a moment time stands still as they watch there stars drift away,

Free those stars will be,

And those who watched will start to fade,

Awaiting for the day that they too with float and join the stars.

Reviews

[jdr / Jennifer]

beautifully vivid- exquisite- very well written. It has a great flow to it.

"For a moment time stands still as they watch there stars drift away,
Free those stars will be,
And those who watched will start to fade,
Awaiting for the day that they too will float and join with the stars."

You have a talent for writing elegant poetry. Thank you for sharing this intricate piece.

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou for such a wonderful review :)

[Enigma]

Beautiful. I really liked this one, very elegant and simple at the same time.

[ThomasJay]

Your softer side shines through with this piece! very well done my friend.

[Alexa Tasch]

A very interesting piece! Its so creative!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

greatly,fantasticly done

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you. :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

your welcome

[Rogue]

This took me there. The opening of my hands and watching them slowly float up and into the night. An enjoyable experience and a lovely write. :)

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you Rogue I'm glad it took you there. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Really good.

I hate to say so little, but, trust me, if you get big long feedback from kimmer, you've done something horribly wrong ;-) I didn't understand all of it, but I interpenetrated it to the best of my abilities ;-) Well done

[AWickedMoon]

Ha-ha! Thank you KAOmsted. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Always my pleasure.

[Darkening Shadow]

Great Poem!

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou :)

[Darkening Shadow]

no prob

[L. Catherine]

To be completely honest, when saw the title of this and the picture, I immediately thought of the Disney movie "Tangled"! But back to reviewing the poem itself, I thought it was quite beautiful, sort of delicate and care-free. Really good job!

[AWickedMoon]

Ha-ha thats my boyfriends favorite movie! :) Thankyou Catherine.

[L. Catherine]

Hahaha you're welcome!

[Monster ^.^]

I reeeaaaly loved the lines:
"And those who watched will start to fade,
Awaiting for the day that they too with float and join the stars."

So classy and touching at the same time! wow :)

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou :)

[Megara]

this reminds me of chinese lantern festivals.

[AWickedMoon]

Close its about floating lanterns :)

[Megara]

cool