Carnage

Wanted to right a dark poem this is what i got.

The blood seeps in to her shoes, as she walks past the dead

A wicked smile placed upon her lips

Her eyes dancing a dangerous fire

She extends out her arms beckoning her creatures forward

Her black hair dangles down covering her face,

As the crows pick at her flesh,

She picks up a dagger with her sharp teeth

Then she crouches disappearing under the mass of birds

Moments pass,

A terrifying shriek explodes the air around,

And the crows fly away, but one remains,

She opens her enormous blood red wings and lifts up to the night sky

As she does fire spreads around the field mangling everything in sight.

Author's Note

I wrote one poem then decided to write three more the next in this little poem series is "Blood Lust." Let me know what you think of them. Any feedback is appreciated.

Reviews

[first second third]

didnt get this much when i first began reading then it became clear. very good job

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you I acuually wrote a story with three poems this is the first one, that might explain more? :)

[first second third]

i have read your other too be fore thats probably why i go so lost:)

[AWickedMoon]

haha I see :)

[sithlordjp]

birds are faithful companions when it comes to writing darker poetry. You used them well... Excellent work!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you!(A bit delayed?) He-he

[Cynical_Art]

I love the atmosphere and dark details. Keep it up!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Zachary_James]

Very dark and briliantly done. I am impressed, with how you created this beautiful piece of art.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[Satan's Daughter]

Dark, but beautiful. I loved it.

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! :)

[Nami Machae]

I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! :)

[Calibaster]

Wow, that was quite morbid, but very good at the same time! Great job!

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! :)

[elizander]

i'd really like to see a story about this, it's a very good character

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! I was debating whether to string a few poems together the poem Blood Red is connected to this poem.

[AWickedMoon]

Good news! I made this and three other poems in to a story they go "Carnage",Blood Lust, Dark Love and Blood Red. :)

[elizander]

yes!! cant wait to read them

[scripted]

this has a dark feel to it... i thuoght it was well penned, and i like your description... thank you for sharing Danielle