These Eyes Have a Flame

Again my inspiration for this poem was from a picture off of Google. Please point out any mistakes and what you think!

Theres a flame in these eyes

not a sparkle, but a flame

A fspark of hope, a flicker of pain

a steady flow of passion,

a dancing flame who plays the game of live or die

a flame of warmth,

a flame to light your way when you cant see away out

a flame to enchant you,

You can watch it grow or let it go just remember...

a flame thats not been put all the way out can turn in to a raging fire...

Reviews

[Green]

Just wondering what you would have had to have been googling to get a picture that would inspire this but maybe it's easier than it seems. Anywhos, I only have one suggestion as far as corrections and that is at 'a flame of hope'. Paired with 'a flicker of pain' it seemed like, to me at least, that you were trying to say something alone the lines of what makes up the fire or something like that (I have the idea in my head I just can't quite make it into words). My suggestion would be something like 'a spark of hope' but hey, it's still good either way.
I love the last line, though. it really puts the whole thing into perspective.

[AWickedMoon]

I just came up with the name of the poem then went to Google and typed it in. The attached picture is what inspired the picture. Most of my poems are just random one verse pops in my head and I just go from there or I just Google random stuff and she if anything inspires me. I did like your idea so I have changed it. :)

[Green]

That's neat. Half the time my stuff just pops out of my head fully grown - like Athena.